CLN's Seasonal Reviews (CLOSED)

5 centimeters per second - by - Eulissah

Reviewer: badestbitchhh_

Cover: 

The structuring of the cover revolves around the plot element and describes the story. It's neat and clean which makes it look attractive and read-worthy but the pink color used in the "centimeters" font is not blending in with the cover, I'll suggest you either choose the soft pink color from the background or black to replace it.

Title:

I yet again like how you used the plot element so deliberately, although it's not that obvious before you read the whole book. For the first time, I thought it was just for relevance but I was wrong, it has a deeper connection with the plot.

Description:

 The description is intriguing but the structuring is wrong. Rather than adding dividers and stating YOONMIN AU, you could have finished the whole write-up and then added that it's a Yoonmin AU. I'll also advise you to use the second part as the first one and the first part after that.

Plot: 

The plot held deep meaning and teaching for the readers. Even the structuring was good and the usage was done amazingly.

Storyline:

 The order was good and I felt the connection but failed to understand a few chapters. Rather than explaining in the last, try detailing every chapter so that the readers are not kept in confusion for so long. Besides that, it was unique to have these kinds of chapters which made me read it till the end with plenty of interest.

Dialogue Delivery:

 There were only a few dialogues since the message was more from the thoughts but I still think you could increase the number of dialogues by a bit. Also, I'll advise you to state which perspective you are using in the chapter itself, otherwise, it's a bit confusing.

Indulgent:

 I really liked the story and the meaning behind it was good but proper description and statements could have been used to eschew any kind of bemusement.

Characters:

 The character description needs improvement since there were only minor details mentioned. The development was quite an inspiration but I'll suggest you write both sides of the story; include Yoongi's point of view more often.

Pace:

 The pace was quite good, neither that fast nor that slow, although a few parts seemed a bit fast, like Taehyung's feelings for Jimin. You could have provided more about him, explain their theory, and then reveal this part.

Grammar and Vocab:

Short sentences:  At times, I thought it was unnecessary to have two sentences like I got confused. You smiled. This could have been written as I got confused whilst...you smiled.

Sentence structuring: Some sentences could have been better, for instance: I heard the signal bell go off. The black and yellow bars lowered down. This could be written as, hearing the signal bell go off, the black and yellow bars lowered down.

Punctuation: There were a few punctuation mistakes like
The last one we shared, It's been three, four months huh?
Here, you should have added an apostrophe(') after It, remove the capitalization from I and add a dash(-) in between three and four.

Strengths: Perspective and voice.
Weakness: Proper description/explanation along with grammar.
Suggestion: I would suggest you read books that have advanced grammar and try writing incidents from your daily life as meticulously as possible. It will help you get a sharper mind and a broader knowledge of both aspects.