Okay, so, um. I rewrote every single chapter into 3rd person and past tense, but there were also other changes along the road. The changes were big and it is even more slowburn now between Draco and Elwia.
What I have changed in the chapters:
- Chapter 12 Dancing Queens: Elwia and Draco don't have sex in the girl's bathroom during the slytherin party, instead they simply have a small fight.
- Chapter 19 The Prank: After Elwia pranks Draco (turns him into a ferret), originally they have angry sex in the bathroom. I changed it to them having a small shouting session and NO SEX, sorry.
- Chapter 21 Halloween: Elwia keeps the ferret that she pranked Draco with and names him Scorpius. Also a meaningful and an important scene between Pansy and Elwia, and also a sad scene between Harry and Elwia. You should read this chapter.
- Chapter 23 Obliviate: Originally Elwia asks Draco to obliviate her after Taylors SA her and he does so, but I changed it so Elwia doesn't get obliviated. She remembers everything, sadly.
- Chapter 25 Insanity: Originally Flora Carrow is a nice character, but now she is a bitch and um, is kind of seeing/dating Draco, sorry. She is Elwia's friend but is very fake and pretentious.
- Chapter 27 Sharing Secrets: Originally Draco and Elwia share secrets, and kind of nonverbally confess to having some sort of feelings to each other and share a small kiss. This doesn't happen anymore! They share secrets and have a good moment, and idk, you should really read it. They don't kiss or confess to any feelings! :)
- Chapter 29 The Dark Lord: Idk, Flora is just acting annoying in the end. You should read it.
- Chapter 31 Blood Runs Thicker Than Water: I just added a few more lines, and also Elwia is now living in Grimmauld Place. Her things from her room in France were moved to her new room at Grimmauld Place. She lives there when she's not in school, it's her new home.
- Chapter 33 Diagon Alley: You should really just read this chapter because I don't want to spoil it. I added a totally new scene and I personally love it.
So, basically:
- I deleted cringe scenes and lines
- I added depth to the story and people's personalities
- No sex or kissing or any feelings between Draco and Elwia, I made everything more slowburn! There is tension, though. They don't hate each other but they're not friends yet either.
- I added new scenes and lines
- I changed Flora's personality, we used to like her, but we don't like her anymore. I have other things planned now, sorry
- Draco and Flora are kind of dating
I hope you don't hate the changes :( I just didn't like the smut chapters, I feel as if they happened way too quick and I have new things planned for this story now. There will be smut in the future, don't worry lmao
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