Book : The Path Of Magic
Author : EarlGrey122
Reviewer admin : ThatChristian
Grammar, spelling and punctuation
I came across several punctuation and spelling mistakes throughout all of your chapters. Simple, fixable mistakes but it takes a toll on the reader. And some places there was incorrect punctuation. I'll say at the end of this. But out of a 1 to 10 range on grammar, spelling and punctuation , I'm sorry but I give about a 4.
Description : the description was pretty good. But I can't get passed the part about the Mages and demons. To make your description shorter long, I suggest putting the details on how the demons have greed and can't control it and the stuff about the Mages in the beginning of the book. I'll explain later. But otherwise, I didn't see anything wrong, Good job. I think it reels the reader in especially if they're into that type of stuff. 1 to 10 scale, 8
Cover : Oh yay! *says excitedly * I absolutely love the cover. It gives it the mythical look that you're going for. It goes along the lines with your
book and it's just AWESOME ! It's attractive, the colors are good, and the font is good.
1 to 10 , 9
Note : I must address this problem with foul language in chapter 4. I stumbled across 3 cuss words in the chapter. I don't know if you saw the chapter about the foul language in this book (HTUD) but we don't review books with cuss words. So in further chapters, keep it clean or have someone else review it. I don't like the foul language and neither does the Leader. Sorry but it's the rules.
Explanation : This is a really quick thing for you. The punctuation problem was you were putting colons before quotations, which is a punctuation error. And with the mage and demon stuff in the description you could easily be put in someone's dialogue in the story. I think it would actually fit, and it will possibly add more of suspense and interest if the reader doesn't know right away what the demons and Mages are like.
Overall : *dances * if you will just fix the grammar, spelling, and punctuation stuff, and do some tweaks to the story it will be absep writing.
With All Love--- ThatChristian ♡♡♡♡
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