Reviewer: Leader A
Author dreamgirl89
Book title: Live as you learn
Genre: Teen fiction
I'll be honest, I didn't read into your book because of the fact that when I was reading one of the characters looked at a guy with hunger. This weirded me out so I only read the first chapter. I don't know if the guy was gay or what but, I specifically say in our rules that we don't accept LGBT+. So I will just be talking about the cover, description, and grammar.
Cover: Your cover needs a little work because it's just a picture of a guy. I would get someone to make you one :)
Description: The description isn't that interesting.. I got bored with the book just by reading your first line. I suggest you edit it so that your readers are more interested.
Grammar: I feel like I'm being really rude right now.. :( Anyways, I would either hire a editor or go through your book and edit the chapters yourself. I didn't notice any spelling errors though! But you had several misplaced commas.. Oh! And two years earlier and two year later thing.. I would instead put:
*Flashback to two years ago.*
And then when talking about two years later.. do this:
*Present time*
I'm not saying your exactly wrong for what you did, but in order for you not to repeat the word two too many times I would do that instead :)
Overall: If you edit the chapters, description, and cover I think your book will improve a lot!
All my love, Leader A
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