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Review: The Obsidian Prophecy

@HTUD67 ✔Ooooh. I love a bit of fantasy, and besides elves are my favorite fantastical race ;))) I’m such a nerd omg
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Author: JessicaBlake93
Title: The Obsidian Prophecy
Genre: Fantasy
Now for the review itself:
Cover 10/10 Very light and almost magical which matches the atmosphere of the story itself. Its formality captures my attention so I would definitely look at it before scrolling on!
Description 5/10 The summary is way too long to be “just a description.” Though it gives a lot of information to the reader who stumbles upon the story, it it far too long. It makes me feel like I am already reading the prologue which isn’t good, because summaries are meant to only be 4-6 medium length sentences.
Spelling and Grammar: 7.5/10 The story mostly had correct grammar, but the dialogue itself needs work. When ending dialogue, the comma goes after the word, but before the parentheses. Also, there seems to be multiple forms of punctuation right next to each other which is a blatant mistake. The dialogue should probably be spaced around more; new dialogue typically starts a new paragraph anyways. I also noticed a few spelling mistakes of basic words, but there were not many.
Overall 9/10 The prologue captured the reader’s attention when they first read it, making them want to go on and know more about the war that was occurring. I love it! In the first chapter, it begins with a slow buildup of events so the reader can vividly visualize the typical life of the main character, or just an elf in general. It is very well done. Your paragraphs are a little long; the reader begins to lose interest halfway through. The descriptions are magnificent and they make me want to read more because it feels like I’m actually there!
Well done, friend. ✔