Heartbreaker

Editing!! More Like Rewriting!!

So I decided to read my own story, after four years... I know, I know I'm absolutely embarrassed of at least 80% of it. I promise I'm not this bad at writing my newer fanfics, Manipulative Power (Aro) is a bit better but I'd still like to edit that, my newest fanfic Too Dangerous (Elijah Mikaelson) is in much better shape with regular updates but I can't voice my opinion on my Carlisle one since I haven't read back over it, definitely not as bad as this one tho.

I've decided to rewrite it basically, I'll change the story up a bit but some bits will stay the same.

Firstly I was gonna keep her as bella's sister but she stayed with their mother when Bella moved, during eclipse when Victoria gathers her newborn army, Melania will try to surprise Bella, not knowing there's disappearances in Seattle. When Renee ring Bella to ask how she liked her surprise, they realise Mel never made it.

She'll be changed and I'll be keeping Aiden but he'll be Victoria's old friend, since before she met James and he's promised to help her train them but wouldn't fight. Mel and Aiden meet, blah blah blah.

When the Volturi come at the end of the battle they see her and then Aro will see her in Jane's thoughts, realising they're mates. I don't want to reveal everything but it'll go from there.

I feel like it has structure! Some feedback would be welcome on the topic, can be good but mostly bad or constructive, need to know what the readers like!