Hola! This is my first review here, so I apologize if it isn't up to your standard. If it isn't, please let me know and I'll try to clear everything up!
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User- @bhavyaoverthere
Title- I see you
Genre- Dystopian
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Cover-The cover is relatively simple. I think I've seen many like it around Wattpad. I'm not complaining about the simplicity though, because the gradient itself is still a beautiful blue! However, you might want to consider hiring a cover maker, just so you get a cover that matches the story better! The title of the book itself doesn't show up as much, so in case you do want to keep this cover, I would advise that you make the title slightly larger so people can see it!
Title-I haven't' read much of it so far (I will, it's definitely on my Reading List), but the name certainly draws you in! Sands of the Hermit Kingdom...one wonders what that could mean. Where is this kingdom? Is it figurative language? This itself draws a reader in! Good job!
Blurb-The blurb is definitely long, but I enjoyed it! All is well right up until that part "fabled resistance". Why is this resistance so fabled? What makes him want to join? You want to include his purpose into the blurb. Min-Soo's character definitely makes me immediately intrigued from the first sentence! When you say "legendary story", could you include some details?
The words legendary story are included in many places, but you definitely should add a little teaser to what makes it legendary. For sure, you don't want to reveal too much of course, and I completely understand that! What's the point of reading if you already know?I'm sure that their story is legendary-but you have to include a bit of a teaser.
Sorta like when you watch a movie. "BAM BOOM BAM! PEW PEW PEW! A LEGENDARY STORY! WATCH FOR SURE!" But you have 0 idea what's happening, so you're like "Eh. What about marvel?" This is the same thing! Try to add some descriptions. But overall-except for some nitpicking, the blurb is awesome! Double thumbs up!
Characters-Jungkook, the character that immediately shows up (right?), he lives in poverty. However, he does have some access to money through looting. I hope that no reader relates to this, so instead of relating, I'm trying to put myself into Jungkook's shoes.
What we can definitely see is that he hates the General. We can also see why. In addition, we (as in the reader), can also see how he feels about people who like the General "Kiss-up" and "it surprises me". This all makes sense! He hates the leaders! You're leading us into the plot. But...
One thing the reader may be a bit annoyed at is the inner conflict. Right when he's about to purchase the item from the vendor-I shall take no names-Jungkook mentions to himself that he's been saving up for some time, and that he's also in poverty.
The reader might question "Uh, so why are you buying this random object with no real use?" This could make them frustrated with the character. However, Jungkook's emotions, from what I can sense even in the first chapter, are spot-on, too good!
Setting-No critics for this one! You set the scene up really well!
The immediate beginning, we know where they are, we know exactly WHERE he is, we know the condition of the place-your scene setting skills are really good, which is a huge asset because I've read books where I have no clue where it's happening. As Steve Trevor said "No, where are we?"
Plot-Like it or not-you have some style! Immediately, even as the first chapter comes to a close, we can see where this plot might be going! He buys a mysterious item-this hooks the reader on. What is this mysterious item? Where will it lead him? In addition, this promises to be an action-packed adventure! It's set in North Korea. I mean, what do you expect?
Other Notes-Your grammar is good! Occasionally, you forget some commas here and there, but nothing too great that you have to go back and revise. Also great descriptions, and amazing figurative language! I don't see why this book doesn't have more views!As a final note: Some things you might want to improve are parts of the blurb, and the cover. Other than that-it's a great story!
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