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*** #19- Babysitter, @im_namjesus-1st

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User- @im_namjesus-1st

Book- Babysitter

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Cover: Wow! The cover is beautiful! I checked your Graphic Shop out, and you have a lot of talent! I really enjoy how you gave a living room sort of setting behind Yoongi, making it look as if he's actually a babysitter. The blending was done well. Honestly, the cover is wonderful as it is! I just have a few suggestions, if you'd have them. The highlights add a wonderful touch, but it looks a little too crowded and pastel, because there are a lot of them. Also, please remember to add your name! The author is very important to the story, obviously! I also love the subtitle now, but it isn't very visible, so if you want to change that, that's another thing I can tell you. 

Title: The title is simple, and I think it matches with the rest of your books. It has a similar font, and simple wording. It describes the story perfectly too! I'm also glad you gave the name, just in case. So yeah, not much to say about the title. Blurb: The blurb does describe the story well, including dialogue and important details about the situation Yoongi was put into. One thing is, most people scroll by tags. So whenever they click on your story, it only gives a minimized version of the blurb. I think that maybe you should put the overall description of the story first, just to hook people on quickly. Often, people click off of stories, despite it being perfect for them. A summary of the plot being the first thing they see would be a perfect hooker. Another quick thing; remember to add the apostrophe next to the 'it's' right at the bottom! Sorry, couldn't help it!

Characters: So far, mostly there's only Yoongi and his aunt. I think you introduced Yoongi pretty well! His grumpy and pessimistic outlook really shines through, as well as his dedication towards BTS. He doesn't get flustered easily, and mostly looks upon things in a brush-off attitude. At least, that's what I got from the story. What I loved was how you transformed what would seem like a perfect morning to us, into something terrible for him. It really gives a great perspective on the character! However, a lot of his inner thoughts seem a bit bland. Maybe add some more emotion to certain points. Stress some more on the fact that he missed the meeting, and his remorse or embarrassment? The smallest of details make a very big difference! 

Setting: There is not much exact scene setting. What I do enjoy is how you set a scene with dialogue and characters instead of full-out description. This makes for shorter, cleaner paragraphs and more believable first person. 

Plot: So far, the plot is going along steadily! We have a plot, and what was promised in the blurb, which is, to say, the very entertaining situation of Yoongi babysitting. I like how the first chapter didn't dive into things, but just gave it a steady and believable entrance into the topic and plot! I'm looking forward to reading more! Other Stuff: I really like your dividers, both in the blurb and story. It adds a wonderful aesthetic, like a nursery (or that's what I think, lol). Thank you!

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