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User- @Akhila6002
Book- Aranika Devi: Ramasutaa, Princess of Kosala from Kaliyug
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Cover- I really like certain aspects of the cover. For example, I think the font is really pretty, and the pictures in the back have similar color schemes, but they don't really flow well together. Maybe try a more historical fiction feel?
Title- I was a bit confused about the title. At first, I thought it was your author's name on the cover so big, but the actual title is the main character's name. I'm not sure how many readers will be attracted to the name alone, but it might just be working for you, I guess, since you have almost 20k reads.
Blurb- Hey, so... I think you should download Grammarly. Or any other free grammar extension. The blurb is very long and verrrrryyyy confusing. There are a lot of dependent clauses that are used as sentences.
Characters- Shree sounds like too perfect of a character without any flaws. Just be sure to include some points that will make her seem more human to the readers. The beginning of the chapter sounds a lot like the narrator is just monologuing to us about how Shree loathes what the world has become, and this can sound borderline... condescending.
Setting- I was a little confused on this... but I think it's India, correct?
Other comments- So, I assume that your first language isn't English, and that's alright! I admire you for practicing your language skills through writing! However, I think maybe you should try taking a few English writing classes? Or perhaps just studying with workbooks?
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I think with some more practice at writing, your work can vastly improve. Thanks for applying!
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