Turtle Rock Review Shop

~~~ @HurricaneKareena

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Name- HurricaneKareena

Specialties- YA, Mystery, Paranormal, Thriller, Horror, Romance (basically everything except fanfiction)

Intro- Hello! My name is HK. I've been writing on Wattpad for about four years and reviewing books for one year. When I review, I'm very thorough, and I will make sure to check your book for everything. When I say everything, I mean everything.

You should also note that I am very blunt. If I see something wrong in your work, you can count on me pointing it out. I will never be outright mean or rude, and if you feel that I crossed a lie, please call me out on it so we can talk about my behavior through the comments in this book. I enjoy promoting discussions about healthy criticism!

Payment-

1. Read the first chapter of 'The Donut Shop' and give me a summary of what the chapter was about before saying if you would/wouldn't continue reading. On another note, prologues, character aesthetics, and playlists don't count as chapters. I'm only asking you to read ONE CHAPTER in return for a review. The amount of effort you put into the only thing I'm asking you to do will reflect in your review. 

2. Fill out the form in the next chapter and tag me in it.

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EXAMPLE REVIEW:

Book- Under the Violet Sky, 

General Review- 

Characters- I love Violet. I love her inner voice monologue, and she reminds me of a devious, but not wicked, person. I love that! I think the reason I was so attracted to your book is because of your strong character voice. I've been told before that I'm really good at identifying character voices that stand out, and yours definitely does! I was impressed by how similar our characters are. Scarlett, in the beginning, seems to be disgruntled and frustrated with Violet, which is an interesting first impression to leave on a reader. I don't really have any advice for you in this department except for proving some imagery for Ian. Give us some information about how Ian looks, how his body language is even after the office scene.

Setting- Clear setting. Good job developing imagery to pair with the school. I loved the descriptions you mentioned about the yellow walls stained with gray spots. This had me remembering our own gym!

Plot- Definitely a nice hook. That was the first thing that drew me into the book. When Violet is hearing her sister talking from beside her, I would suggest putting her name there to make it clearer for the reader. I had to reread that part a few times to completely understand what she was saying and to distinguish that it wasn't Violet inner-monologuing. I think you should clarify if Violet was just absent from school for these two years or if she dealt with homeschooling if you are going to mention that she missed school all of these months. If she was, you should shorten the time, have her attend an alternative school, or have her expelled altogether.

Other comments- I enjoyed the imagery you used to describe Scarlet from Violet's POV in the beginning. When Scarlet is telling Violet to hurry up before they are late, there should be a period: "glance spared at me. 'Let's go, I don't want to be late.'" Your writing style is very relatable and brings the reader into the world that you created. Nice job!