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~~~#9- Love Limited, @ayeshaeyesshot

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User- @ayeshaeyesshot

Book- Love Limited

Genre- Romance

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Cover- I'm going to start by pointing out all of the things I liked because there was a lot of good stuff happening! Also, note that I look at the cover, title, and blurb before I even open your book, so these are all of my first impressions. 

The picture is absolutely stunning. I love the color scheme you have going on. It's mostly white with faint splashes of red on the woman's lips and the rose, which tells us readers that the book is most certainly a romance. Paired with this, the woman has a blissful expression.

The font of the title is also perfect for the book, and it stands out without being too hard to read. Even though the text is white, you have added a shadow to cast it from its background, which was pretty clever. Overall, I really like the cover!

However, I have a few small gripes with it. I have no idea what the text at the top of the cover says because it's too thin and small. This also applies to your name at the bottom of the title. I can make out the first part, but the second half is completely lost on me because it blends in with the white of the woman's lehenga. 

Title- I'm not gonna lie to you: I read the blurb before I gave a judgment on your title because I wanted to see if the overall plot matched with the title. Maybe it's because I didn't read the first chapter before judging the title, but I don't really see how the title correlates with the plot you've outlined in the blurb. 

Did you name the book 'Love Limited' because of a romance arc between both of the brothers?

I think the title itself is nice for a romance book. If the romance is between Murtaza and Tamara while she is getting married to the brother, then I think the title mostly applies, and you shouldn't change it. 

Blurb- Wow... okay. There's a lot going on here, and everything has very questionable grammar. I don't know how to put this any other way, so I'm just going to rip off the bandage. 

I would advise buying a book on English grammar and punctuation. Just... it will definitely help you in the future for your writing endeavors. If you don't want to pay money for a writing book, there are also free extensions/websites to help you. 

Grammarly, for one, is my go-to because you can use it on just about any app. In addition to on-the-spot grammar fixes, they have an 'English Grammar Handbook that you can visit for free. I'll link it over here if you want to check it out:

Other than the grammar, you do a lot of telling and no showing. Of course, you should be describing what the book is like to the readers, but you should also make it fun to read. Yes., reading this blurb told me what awesome stuff you have in store, but it was very much like dry roti. Gimme some paneer, or something savory, to eat with this!

First impression- Now that I've opened the first chapter, I'm pleasantly surprised by the grammar. Maybe it was just the blurb that was off, but your grammar is significantly better here. There are a ton of punctuation mistakes, but nothing that can't be fixed with a really good edit or two. 

Characters- Right off the bat, they seem like pretty close friends. I enjoy their casual banter and their flirting. It was pretty dang cute if I do say so myself. I think you have a pretty good grip on dialogue, but with a bit more actions sprinkled throughout, a reader will be able to clearly see each character as if it's a movie.