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User- @wolfiesreadtoo
Book- Moonlit Songs
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Cover-The cover is very beautiful! The colors blend very well together, and I can see the full moon and the underwater thing, which, I can tell from the blurb, must mean werewolves and mermaids, which is a wonderful touch! In addition, the font is wonderful! Some quick things I can just point out are that the text is a little small to fill the entire space, which might be a little more aesthetically pleasing.
Also, your words 'The Fate of Dawngarde' are not very visible. I peered at it very closely, that's why I noticed it. Is it important to your book? If so, I think that maybe it should be a bit more catching to the eye? I've noticed that books with very visible things in the cover are more clicked upon, since many people wrongly read books just because they judge the cover. Still though, I really loved the cover a lot!
Title-Your title just sounds wonderful! I don't know how it fits in with your story yet, but I think that it's just such a pretty name, and a great choice for your book. Is it something to do with the fact that sirens/mermaids sing, and you know, moon and werewolves, or am I reading into it too much? Maybe I'm reading into it too much, lol.
Blurb-Your blurb, I think, immediately hooks a reader. The little steamy quote from your book in the beginning of the blurb is a nice touch which gets readers looking. Often, books with things like this often get a reader reading! You asked me not to focus too much on grammar, so I'll work on your character, setting, and plot more!
Character-I think that your descriptions, and in your first chapter, her actions really reflect Astrea's character! You very cleverly incorporated her strengths, such as swimming, and her preferred songs, as well as some things like she immediately forgot about the boy when she remembered her tuna sandwich.
We didn't get much character development for the male (lead?), but I think it was a good description of him nonetheless. I think that maybe some more character development in the first chapter helps a reader get to know her better, and continue to read! However, that's obviously your choice.
Plot-Some stuff that was great in the first chapter was the introduction of some sparking romance! You included her checking him out, as well as some sparks flying! You also added things about her not able to get him out of his brain. He also seemed very mysterious, so there is some mystery romance for the reader! The reader can tell that it's about to get steamy! You do that part very well!Some things that may be good for the first chapter is upping the suspense a little bit? Maybe adding something unusual about the mysterious man whom she met and now cannot forget? These things make the reader on edge!
Other Stuff-Your descriptions are stellar! I also think that you are a very subtle and well-read author! Some other things are that your names, I think have meanings behind them? These little elements are wonderful in your story!
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