Book title: Beyond No Entry
Author: Nayasha_Jena
Reviewer: Xhsxohs123456
Disclaimer: I am only one person. I guarantee you my opinion will not be the same as someone else’s and that is a 100% okay. I am never trying to offend or discourage anyone. My only goal is to help you improve your story the best I can.
~Harry
Review
Score: 7.5/10
DESCRIPTION: The description is perfect. Small yet enough to grab the attention of the reader and make them interested in your story. The use of hypothetical situation in your description to make the reader relate to the main character or make them feel as if they are the main character themselves is a great idea.
GRAMMAR AND SPELLING: There were a few grammar errors that I observed however not much as to effect the reader. Could be easily taken care of after a revision of the manuscript.
WRITING STYLE: The writing style is good but it can be improved. First off I would advise you not to use abbreviations/ slangs like “LOL” as they can irk the reader. It doesn’t appeal to the audience usually. Refrain from using a lot of quotations while writing the dialogues between the characters and try to make them brief and seem more natural. The important scenes can be a little more descriptive so as to paint a picture of what actually you want the reader to sea. The reader is a viewer and it’s your job to sketch, paint and explain your painting.
PLOT: The plot is pretty interesting. If someone is interested in a light hearted read with fantasy, mystery and comedy all served on one platter with romance as a side dish then this book is a perfect choice for them.
CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT: Well it has been only ten chapters so I can’t judge. But the character development so far is pretty much as expected till now. Although I hope you will soon morph the individual personalities and solidify them.
OVERALL REVIEW: Overall I really like the plot. The book so far is keeping up with my expectations. However, I would like you to remember the few points that I have mentioned in the writing style and you are good to go!
Need a cool summer read? There you have it, Beyond No entry.
I would definitely love to read more.
P.s Rather than asking yourself what the story is , ask yourself what the character is like and how they would react to the situation.
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