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Brains Meets Brawn for @Sunmeee

@Sunmeee

Review for Brains Meets Brawn:

Title: a little cliche-y but okay. It could be worse.
Summery/ hook: good, enough to get people interested but not too much to give everything away.

Characters:
Main character. Pretty good. I like some parts of her attitude. She's really smart and I like that. I also like how she tries to obey her parents. Most main characters in teen books are completely disobedient. It's good to see a change. However sometimes she's too much of a Mary Sue. She's often too perfect, too smart and too strong. Give her some flaws.
Olly. I actually like her. She's a good depiction of a younger sibling. I like how well she ties into the story as well.
Her parents. It's nice to see some more realistic parents rather then absent ones. I would tone it down with the strictness though, especially with her dad. He's kinda strange sometimes. I like her mom a lot though. While strict, she really seems to care about her children.
Ian/ bad boy: I don't like him for the most part. I like that short chapter part with him (I think it was the later part of chapter 3) but other then that, the way you write him is a little unrealistic. He can't be that stupid. Let him be a little more talkative and smarted, please. Not as smart as the main character, but he is beyond stupid.

Grammar/ spelling/ etc:
I noticed a few spelling mistakes but nothing too bad. You're doing great so far. Keep it up.

Writing style: I will have to admit, you writing style is excellent. It literally hooked me. That's an accomplishment cause usually I'm hard to hook. You have to be a good writer to do that. Great job!

Description: Enough description that I can picture it but not too much to get bogged down it the setting. Very good!

Dialogue: The dialogue was pretty good but some parts seemed slightly unrealistic (some of the situations in this book seem unrealistic as well) and Ian needs to talk more. I liked some of the main characters comebacks though.

Plot: I only read up through chapter five, but I think it's going pretty well. I wonder if Ian is more then just a street fighter. The only thing that I would change (or maybe you have it in a later chapter) would be to put the focus more on him and his secret life. Now I do like the part that he has to follow her around. Lol. I think the real action will start from here.

Pacing: Great job on this as well. It is not to fast so people don't get confused and not too slow that people get bored. I was never bored with this book.

Did I enjoy it?
Yes!

Would I continue?
Yes, probably. I have some other books I want to read now but I will try to come back to your book.

My rating:
7 out of 10.
Mainly because the main character annoyed me in some parts and I don't really like Ian that much yet. However I feel like the part where it starts to get really interesting is starting soon. Again I only read up until chapter five. Maybe once I finish the whole book, it could be an 8 or even more.

-Freedom