Book title: Gemicide Amid the blue of BcHaven
Author: LPKnits
Reviewer: RunasheRea
Description: The description is nicely written but you misplaced some punctuation marks. The third paragraph of the description can be changed a bit to add more effect on the word "desirable" in that paragraph.
Grammar: 4/10
There is a lot of malapropism and misplaced nouns, verbs and punctuation marks. Get an editor to help you.
Spelling errors: 9/10
You have a few spelling errors.
The Plot: 4/10
The book's flow is confusing at the very least, the way you wrote the prologue seemed to give a little direction but when you get to the chapters the plot is lost.
Content of your book: 4.5/10
There are repeated paragraphs between dannon and Ida. The characters don't have strong structures. Go back, read through it thoroughly and give your main characters or character more of an identity. Point of view is important in a story because it helps the reader understand characters' feelings and actions. Each character will have his or her own perspective, so whoever is telling the story will impact the reader's opinion of other characters and events, make it clear if it's omniscient or one person perspective.
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