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3.30 pm by @Theandwriting

Book Title: 3:30pm
Author: @Theandwriting
Reviewer: @CrackedBrain

✨Title✨(4.5/5) - You impressed me with your title! It is amazing with the eagerness it offers to the audience to attract them to your novel. Also, I'm relieved that you didn't give a space between 'am' and the numbers, unlike many other people who make this basic mistake of leaving a space. However, I don't know how come your title is related to the story especially when you have mentioned 3:30 p.m. to be the time when the lead's brother died but that doesn't give it any explanation to name it as such, after all, the brother is dead and won't have any role in the story... but I can't make any conclusions without reading the whole book. I hope the title is much more important than this in the further chapters.

✨Cover✨ (4/5) - Your cover is simple yet intriguing. There is no doubt that the book is a teen fiction-based cover. However, the problem here is that your cover sends a positive vibe to its readers—nothing wrong but the theme of the storyline is different from what the cover depicts. The story has more of a mature and slight dark theme, while the cover makes it look like a bright romance story—more of an innocent book if you know what I mean. But the cover certainly is attractive which gives me no reason to give it any less of the points.

✨Blurb✨ (9/10) - I can't believe how much more fabulous your book can be OwO. I don't have much to say for your blurb as it's already perfect with the curiosity it leaves behind among its readers. The amount of information you gave in it is just enough, neither too less nor too much, hooking in its audience towards the storyline.

However, there are a few grammatical mistakes I found in the blurb but they aren't much noticeable. These include only the following two errors which you can correct anytime:
family's lives -----> family's life
at the hands -----> by the hands

'Family' is a singular noun and, therefore, should be followed by 'life' instead of 'lives'.

In your second error, the work is done 'by' the noun instead of 'at' the noun.

Other than this small mistake, I'm totally in love with your story just by seeing the blurb only. And good news for you, I don't easily get impressed with someone when it comes to blurb or their title but you passed in both. Good Job!!

✨Plot/Flow✨ (17/20) - Wow, your book is getting better scores with every criterion. Honestly saying, I loved the plot of your story and it's having quite an originality within it, making me super excited to jump to the further chapters to discover its various elements.

While your plot was awesome in its way, I couldn't say the same for the flow. It wasn't like your story was too fast or too slow, instead, I liked the pace of the story. The reason for deducting the scores in this criteria are the less-interesting cliffhangers you left at the end of the chapters. But I wouldn't blame it on the pace of the story but the description section of the chapters. You could have ended the chapters with a little more description of the characters' emotions or an interesting dialogue to make it more catchy. After all, who doesn't love an exciting cliffhanger ;)

Also, there were some parts in the novel where I kind of got lost from the main scene. I am not sure if you realized it or not, but in a few paragraphs, you diverted the storyline from its main path.

Such as, in chapter two, while you were supposed to tell only sufficient information to describe the reason for the lead's bruises, you diverted the whole description towards an all different road including her mom leaving and breaking up with her ex-boyfriend.

✨Character Development✨ (10/10) - Okay, now I'm getting ashamed of myself for not being able to point out many faults in your book but... Hey, I can't do anything if your work is this awesome!