Book Reviews

Review 6 ➣ @Egwuji

Godly - 5 chapters

Title: By the third chapter, I can tell that the title is connected to the main character's prowress, as well as his flaw. Kudos to that.

Cover: Simple with only a few elements, which is something I appreciate. It was genre fitting too. So the cover did its job in giving the readers an accurate aesthetic of what this book entails.

Blurb: I know my reviews are supposed to come from a reader's perspective, but I think I'll explain this better if I do it as a writer.

Now, as a writer, I can tell there's been some in depth planning in terms of character. The blurb has a good balance of character, conflict and stakes. However, as a reader, I didn't find it interesting because the presentation was at an average level.

The diction used in the blurb is day to day language, with no flair nor suspense. Even typical, I suppose. It's a shame, considering the fact that you've done your homework on analysing and plotting out your novel (which is not something you can expect a reader to see.)

Additionally, from the very brief mention of the female charcter, I'm assuming (without having dived into the chapters yet) she's a side character/romantic interest. If the novel turns out to be dual pov, I'd suggest adding more about her in the blurb. But we'll see!

Characters: Eren has strengths and weaknesses. I personally liked how he is conscious of his ego, but ignorant of how it can easily turn out to be his downfall. Though, his vocabulary to describe hus surroundings could improve, haha.

Great introduction to Luciana. She's this kickass woman and I can't help but simp.

Luis with purple eyes is an interesting new character. He is set in contrast to the first two characters by his lacking in the physical strength department.

Writing style: I can tell that the writer is doing their best and loves their work. There is room for improvement, but I think you're well on your way to a great novel.

Grammar: I'd recommend an editor. There were some errors that could be easily avoided with a second pair of eyes. (I'm so sorry if this sounded pushy, this was written before you actually submitted a form in the editing section of my shop.)

Additionally, sentences are generally lacking in commas where necessary.

I felt as if the first person point of view was used as a shortcut. Better story-telling techniques could have been utilized, but simply weren't, in order to keep the narrative in character.

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First chapter

》The pov of the chapter mentioned at the start could be italicized or in bold. Not compulsory, but it would look better!

》First paragraph's impact was good. Who doesn't love an end-of-the-world scenario?

》Standing, she had an expressionless face. She was drowning in uncertainty.

Sounds a little contradictory, don't you think?

》Physical descriptions were dumped out in paragraphs, which I didn't enjoy. Some might prefer a detailed description from the get-go, so take this with a pinch of salt.

However, looking back on this, I might stress that such detailed descriptions of characters who don't even survive the scene is unnecessary.

》I didn't know 'toddle' was an actual word! I thought you were mixing it with 'toddler.' We learn something new everyday. (I'm getting a little too informal. Back to business~)