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Mr. Arrogant, Ms. Clumsy - 12 chapters
Title ~ It gives center focus to the romance. Although, it sounds generic.
Blurb ~ The idea of the dialogue bit was nice, but Ashley's second line sounded off to me. She felt like he was her responsibility? Feels a little bit like a mother-child dynamic with that wording.
~ Additionally, I'm not a fan of this 'woman bringing light to a man's dark life' idea. I guess it's just a preference.
Cover ~ Fits the genre but a little plain, in my opinion. Nothing stands out. No username/author name given either.
Plot/Content ~ The trope of fake dating is pretty good, but I think marrying the two of them for business reasons does not fit the era the novel is set in (nor are the details written well.) I can suggest a few other ways to employ the fake dating trope?
1) So, the problem was Ashley's family business having financial issues and they needed to present a united front with Ryan's family, right? How about they just act like they're dating for the paparazzi? Plus, it's more believable to the rival firms as well.
2) To solve the financial problem, maybe Ryan and Ashley's firms are forced to merge? They would not be living together in this case so heh, you may not prefer this one.
3) Along with the above scenario, the protagonists are forced go abroad on a business trip together. This puts them together in close proximity and you can still use all the intimate scenes that come with it!
~ I'm an enemies to lovers (and every subversion of it) enthusiast. I don't think this novel does it justice. The problem was that the hate/disagreement doesn't have any scope? I certainly would not hold a grudge over a spilled chocolate milk to this extent, no matter how childish I was.
There are enough and more opportunities for hate in the novel, though.
1) It could be a rival to lovers arc where you put them against each other as headstrong entrepreneurs (who are then forced to collaborate hehe.)
2) The hate could be one-sided. Again, not over something silly, please. Perhaps their fake dating ruins a potential relationship with someone else?
3) They could have met long before the inciting incident for business reasons and butted heads over something. Now that's something to hold a grudge over!
~ In chapter 4, Ashley stumbles upon Ryan, who's crying his eyes out. He yells at her to go away-- makes sense because she did enter his room without permission. However, minutes later, he's pinning her hands above her head to apologise? I see this quite often in the romance genre and in my opinion I don't see the need for it at all. It comes across as forced.
~ I saw no representation whatsoever. Completely white cast. Zilch in lgbtq rep. Maybe I can cut some slack with the illness Ryan has, but it needs more research that area in order to make it more realistic.
