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JUDGE #2 Scores and Feedback

Let's take a look kung ano ang resulta and feedback from JUDGE #2.

Challenger #1: The Ghost's Angel
Content - 22%
Creativity - 15%
Cleanliness - 10%
Total - 47%

FEEDBACK:
I enjoyed the concept and plot-wise of the story. The writer has a clear view of how the two characters, Kai and Cheonsa, interacted with each other. Though there's a positive side having two points of views, however, it can be a bit cluttered if the transition weren't well planned and placed. However, the writer kept the story flow.

Challenger #2: Dear Mirani
Content - 28%
Creativity - 20%
Cleanliness - 10%
Total - 58%

FEEDBACK:
The story as a whole was very heartbreaking itself. I understand what scene and story the writer wanted to tell. However, how it was paced and transitioned was a bit cluttered. There were times the transition between different scene got me a bit confused. Nonetheless, I loved the emotions the writer etched in each word to show the emotions these characters were going through.

Challenger #3: The Next Time
Content - 28%
Creativity - 22%
Cleanliness - 18%
Total - 68%

FEEDBACK:
I commend the writer for having such a way with words. The writing was very visual, depicting every movement and emotions of the scene. I love that about certain stories, especially something dramatic like this short story. The flow was well-planned and thought out. However, there was a loss of focus on the plot,  having a background story away from the main story. It may be necessary to show charactes development, but not so much with short stories. There's so much your readers can process in a span of at least 5 to 10 minutes read. Grab their attention on a hook intro, and grow the story, make them realize something about the character by the end of the short story.

Challenger #4: Behind The Bars
Content - 25%
Creativity - 18%
Cleanliness - 10%
Total - 53%

FEEDBACK:
The story has a nice build up towards the end. It was very engaging and visual, narrating the scene with such emotions. However, the transition was a bit cluttered, which got in the way of making the story flow well. Also, the first scene in the story got in the way of the built up in the end.

Challenger #5:Twisted
Content - 26%
Creativity - 17%
Cleanliness - 11%
Total - 54%

FEEDBACK:
The writer was very elaborate and visual with her choice of narration. However, it got a bit dragging at some points. Nevertheless, the plot was interesting. Also having three sets of a point of view telling the story gave it perspective without diverting away from the story as a whole.

Challenger #6: Take Two
Content - 26%
Creativity - 15%
Cleanliness - 12%
Total - 52%

FEEDBACK:
The writer was very expressive in showing the emotions from the characters. It gave life to the story. However, there were some parts which made it a bit dragging and the transition needed a little bit of a fix. Nevertheless, it was an emotional piece.

Challenger #7: Tangents
Content - 27%
Creativity - 18%
Cleanliness - 9%
Total - 54%

FEEDBACK:
Though I have nothing against tagalog/english stories, however, the writer was inconsistent of what language to use on conversation and narration. It completely took away the tone of the story. However, the transition and flow of the plot were done flawlessly.

Challenger #8: This Time
Content - 26%
Creativity - 21%
Cleanliness - 15%
Total - 62%

FEEDBACK:
The writer was expressive with writing the conversation between characters. It made the words jumped out with pure essence and life. It's a well-character driven plot. However, the end had an anti-climactic tone. Nonetheless, the writes did well in keeping the story in line without swaying away from the main plot.

Challenger #9: Exchange Gift
Content - 27%
Creativity - 21%
Cleanliness - 14%
Total - 62%

FEEDBACK:
The writer created an easy and progressive built up towards the end of the story. The shifting point of view was well used, giving a bit of necessary mystery and perspective to the plot and story as a whole. However, there were instances it dragged towards transitioning in a different point of view. Nonetheless, the story was written with a great tone and ambiance.