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A message from Judge #1

I specifically asked the admin of Glimpse Society to remove the names of the writers of each entry. Ayokong malaman kung sino ang may-akda dahil ang focus ko ay yung mismong piyesa nyo. I was told na may mga kakilala ako na mga sumali.

My point: para maging objective at impartial ako. At kapag ginawa ko yun, malamang may masasaktan sa inyo. Hindi ako ang tipo na magpi-filter para sa ikasisiya niyo. And just to let you know, hindi madali sa akin para magbitaw ng mga feedback na ganyan. Marami sa inyo ang mga bata pa. At alam ko na may ilan sa inyo na balat-sibuyas. But the thing is, you will never get anything from sugarcoated feedback.

Napapailing lang ako sa mga comments nang mga ilang sumali sa challenge na ito. Sa mga nag-comment at may balak pa na mag-comment na hindi kaaya-aya, I won't take it against you.

NABIGYAN LANG AKO NG TASK. WALANG PERSONALAN.

You joined a contest, yet you are not prepared to hear honest feedback. You joined a contest, then you should know that your piece will be judged according to technically, style and such.

If you think, hindi ako naka-relate sa story na gawa n'yo, naisip nyo ba ang mga posibilidad na ito?

1.Magkaiba tayo ng taste pagdating sa writing style (at matalino ang admin ng Glimpse Society to get more judges para di lang iisang 'taste' ang huhusga sa gawa nyo)

2.Something may be really wrong with your story construction.

3.Masyado lang mataas ang expectation n'yo sa gawa nyo.

4. You thought you could please everybody, but you're dead wrong.

5. Your medium - letters. Nakasulat. And this is a one-shot, meaning mas malilimita ang pagkakataon mo na ipadama o ipa-visualize sa amin ang mensahe mo sa kuwento mo. So make good use of your talent in constructing your plot in limited words.

You should not feel off about it. I do not sugarcoat. Those are my honest to goodness thoughts about your stories.I was not asked to be one of the judges para magpa-tweetums sa feedback sa inyo . No, I am not commissioned to please you nor to bash you. Sadly, it seemed that you only looked at the negative parts I pointed out. You didn't take it as a whole. I'm not even sure kung binasa nyo lahat, o nag-focus lang kayo sa masamang feedback lang. 

By the way, have you read my feedback sa ibang stories? Please do.

Do not question my thoughts about the theme 'Second Chance'. I have seen different sides of it. Mapa-romance man yan, family, friends, social awareness' kahit sa hayop or whatever. Hindi ako mababaw na tao. I may sound like one sa nakikita o nababasa nyo sa FB/WP ko, but I'm not. You have no idea how complicated my mind is. I can be a man, woman, gay, lesbi, old/young person, mababaw o malalim na tao, makulit o seryoso. mabait o salbahe ... depende sa sitwasyon.

Akala n'yo ba WattPad lang ang binabasa ko?

Wala akong sinabing perpekto ako. I even pointed out at the last part of my feedback na may mga flaws din ako sa pagsusulat. lalo pa at ang tamad akong mag-edit/mag-revise sa mga gawa kong stories dahil masyadong akong mabusisi.Tendency is some ideas na gusto kong ikwento ay siguradong makakalimutan ko. Eh mas gusto ko pa magkuwento. Yun ang intensyon ko, ang magkwento lang. Out of hobby.

However, I will stand my ground. As one of the judges in this contest, I have to be serious about the task given to me. Hindi ko intensyon na i-bash kayo. I just did what I was supposed to do.You joined, so chew it up. Ponder on what the judges had said. Contemplate on our feedback. It will help you.

I have questions for those who joined, though/  Ano ba ang objective nyo sa pagsali sa contest na ito?

1. To learn : Ayan. Basahin nyo ang mga feedback ng mga judges.

2. To win : Then, you should have thought hard while conceptualizing and writing your piece.

3. Nakikiuso lang kayo. Then stop writing. Write because it is your passion. Write because it brings you positive feeling. Hindi ang superficial na nakikiuso lang kayo at gustong makarinig na, "Wow! Writer sya!"

4. To read all praises : Your in the wrong place. Contests are not designed to please contestants. It is designed to find the best entry.

5.Others reasons : Please let me know.

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IF YOU WANT TO KNOW WHO I AM, LET ME KNOW. I WILL ALSO ASK THE GLIMPSE ADMIN IF I WILL BE ALLOWED TO TELL YOU.
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Kay Lureylie_new

Bakit ka nagsisisi na sumali ka? Kung napasama ko ang loob mo sa feedback ko, my apologies. That's not my intention. However, I will stand to what I have written there.

Why don't you take this opportunity to strive to improve yourself?

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Sa may akda ng EXCHANGE GIFT, here are my rebuttals to your comments:

A.
Nang : kung ang susunod na salita ay pandiwa, pang-abay o pang-uri (the word 'mga' next in between will not affect this rule);panghalili sa PARA at UPANG; pinagsamang NA at NA, Na at NG, NA at ANG; at kung ang NANG ay gagamitin sa unahan ng pangungusap.

Below are just some 'ng' that should have been 'nang' in the story.

ng halos lahat ng nag-aaral dito (pang-abay at pandiwa)
ng pagkatamis-tamis (pang-uri)
ng libre (pang-uri)

B.
Salamat sa pagpapaliwanag kung nasaan ang 'SECOND CHANCE' intro mo, at kung bakit ganun ang last part/ plot twist mo.

The first part/paragraph of the story leaned more on the thought of new hope... not second chance.

Sa binigay mong impression sa akin, mas nagmukhang immoral/pedophile ang tatay sa pagsiping sa sarili nyang anak at nabuntis pa ito. I'm afraid, you've lost the touch there of your own comment lines "second chance to be a good father. Second chance to make things right."

A man who has the intention to be a good father would never impregnate his own child.

I'm not being a moralist here or whatever, but how can it be possible if a man impregnates his own daughter?

So let me say about what I think about your line : "Nagsisi ako bat yan ang entry na yan ang sinali ko. Hindi siya appropriate for wattpad purposes dahil sa lalim."

I would rather term it 'twisted' perception about second chance to make things right. I even question that line: To make things right. May ginawa bang mali si G. Samson noon kaya nawala si Shendy? If yes, it wasn't established as well in the story. If none, then why does he have 'to make things right', right?

With regard to the theme, you have a point in your argument. However, as a reader and judge of your story, it has crossed the borderline of 'second chance' and gave more weight 'incest' or 'twisted' theme.

With regard to your title and explanation of it, hhmm...I'm still trying to disect your point.

The idea of EXCHANGED GIFT is one has to give something in exchange for another. Ano ba ang karega-regalo sa buong senaryo na inanakan ni G.Samson ang sarili nyang anak? Ang pagkabaliw ni Gng. Samson, o ang matagal na pagkawala ni Shendy?

Kung ako ang may-akda nito,mas pipiliin ko ang pamagat na 'KAPALIT'.

But then again, that's your story.

Gaya nang sinabi ko sa feedback, tatlong beses kong inulit ang akda mo. Hinanap ko ang koneksyon nang bawat POV sa last part dahil pakiramdam ko talaga ay may na-miss out ako.Sa piyesa mo ako nagtagal talaga. At inulit ko itong basahin ngayun-ngayon lang matapos kong namnamin ang mahaba mong komento.

I hope you read the part in my feedback #3 lalo na sa unang pangungusap- na gusto ko ang istilo mo sa pagsulat.