Username: Jadeshade
Poem Selected: DarknesS (Without You)
Title Chosen:The Broken Lives
Type: Emotional free verse
No. of Lines: 14
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Title: The Broken Lives
I walk down the halls of solitude.
The laughs, the gossip, the words that hurt.
My bodies numb from the pain you created.
My checks are stained from these tears I cry, my heart it aches to be loved.
My porcelain skin is stained with red, and bruses that hurt less then the pain you caused to my heart.
You've pushed me around long enough, I've seen the lives of the others you tormented.
There gone, they left this life because of you.
Perhaps heaven is better and we would all survive there without your abuse.
The pain is hard to bare and my family is gone from here.
Whats left to give if you keep taking all that I have.
I've had to stitch my heart together to live another day as my world crumbles around me.
Your broken promises will be the death of me, while you laugh at me spreading hate around.
My stomach churns with every kick you place. My head it hurts with all the silent screams I make.
Your oblivious to the world as it burns, so I guess thats your karma you become one of the broken like those you created.
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Total Ratings.
Awwthentic: 3
Miss_Popular_97: 5
Lonely_Glider: 2.5
Owain Glyn: 2
Ratings from Reader's: 24
Average of Readers Ratings: 8
Sum Total: 20.51
Verdict: Your poem is nice. It has an emotional touch that was good. But, there were several errors yet you made it through. I guess, most of the thanks goes to the ratings you got by readers/friends. Lucky You!
Thank you for participating.
Awwthentic~
Dated: 15/09/2014
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