Username: Maryam0614
Poem Selected: Darkness (Without You)
Title chosen: It feels so right
Type: free verse
No.of Lines: 24
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Title: It feels so Right
For the first in my life
I feel love
Your love you made my
Smile turn blue
You made my heart dry
You made me cry like a baby
You push me around
You boss me around
You treat me like an embarrassment
You Bang me repeatedly against the wall.
You made me bleed
But the blood was blue
You could trade me for anything you want
I am a product
I am a object to be move from place to place
I am a robot because of you.
I feel your love
Your love darling
It feels so right because
I choose to open my heart for you
My heart of stone
You made my heart a blue stone
It feels so right
Darling.
Please rate on the scale of 1 - 5 as a comment on this page.
Total Ratings.
Awwthentic: 3
Miss_Popular_97: 3
Lonely_Glider: 3
Owain Glyn: 4
Ratings from Reader's: 7
Average of Readers Ratings: 2.33
Sum Total: 15.33
Verdict: You ran out of votes my dear. On judges rating you were quite close but on overall rating it slipped. I would say that all is not lost. It's a pretty good composition and I believe it will get many reads.
Thank you for participating.
Awwthentic~
Dated: 15/09/2014
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