The Weirder Thoughts of an Aquarius(me)

Romeo and Juliet but Better

Okay so I had to rewrite a scene from Romeo and Juliet and I need criticism and everyone irl is telling me I'm great but that's not perfect so tell me how to be perfect.
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XxObsessiveLoyalGorlxX=Juliet

    Romeo logged on to his Amino account and started scrolling through recent feed trying to find another amino to join. There was nothing on here he had not seen. Finally he found a good post that caught his eye. It was about a YouTuber he enjoyed. What amino group is this? Romeo thought checking for the group. To his pleasant surprise he found out that the YouTuber he cherished so much had an amino group.

    Obviously he joined he joined it right away. For what felt like hours but what was only about 30 minutes he scrolled through posts until he found one particular post about someone meeting up with someone they met on the amino group. It reminded him of his recent breakup with his own girlfriend. Suddenly he couldn’t focus on the posts anymore and went into a depressive spiral which led to him messaging up his best bud Benvolio, Ben for short.

Romboi: I am sad boi help ;-;

BennyBud: Who hurt you? Do I have to kill someone for you? My friend shalt not be sad.

Romboi: I joined my fav YouTubers amino and saw a post about a couple and now I’m thinking about Rosaline. I’m gonna die alone in an alleyway and no one will remember me ;-;

BennyBud: First off, I’d remember you. Secondly, you wouldn’t die in an alleyway. And lastly, you need to forget about Rosaline. All I’ve heard about for the past three weeks is Rosaline this Rosaline that. Get over yourself.

Romboi: B-but. She was my girl. She’s so wonderful.

BennyBud: Okay so here’s what you’re gonna do. Friend me on the amino group, I’m still  BennyBud. Then tomorrow there is going to be a chat event maybe you’ll meet some friends to distract you.

RomBoi: Fine, but i won’t like it.

    Romeo started saltily ignoring Ben after and tried to sleep. He decided he didn’t need any sleep after staring at a blank ceiling for an hour. He pulled out his phone and went back to Amino. Maybe I’ll make an edit for the YouTube Amino. Once he had finished the edit he posted it. After reloading the page several times someone finally liked his amazing post. It was someone with the username XxObsessiveLoyalGorlxX.

    She was a high level user and had been on the amino for nearly two years, since it’s beginning. All of posts were high quality and had to take many hours to create. What a talented person, also maybe a little obsessive like her name suggests. Romeo liked all of her posts before falling asleep.

    Romeo was awoken by his phone violently vibrating as Ben was trying to call him. Apparently Ben had been trying to call Romeo all morning since he had over 50 notifications all from missed calls.

“Oh my goooood what do you need? I’m tryna sleep!” Romeo complained loudly to Ben.

“Well if I don’t call you you’ll miss the chat event! You don’t wanna make friends in real life so you might as well make online friends,” Ben said angrily to Romeo.

“I don’t need friends, I have YouTube and Netflix to fill the void of having no friends,” Romeo pouted.

Ben let out a loud sigh before saying, “Okay so, the event is at twelve and if you don’t show up exactly at twelve I’m going to your house and stealing all your bread.”

“No not my bread! I need it for french toast!”

“Then show up, or else no more bread,” Ben hung up before Romeo could protest anymore.  Romeo had no choice now, Ben had done this once before and ate three loaves of bread within two days so Romeo was deprived of french toast and sandwiches for a whole week.

Twelve o’clock rolled around and he got the Amino notification about the chat event starting. He begrudgingly joined in and saw Ben talking to people already.

BennyBud: Look who finally shows up 20 seconds late.

RomBoi: Leave my bread alone.

XxObsessiveLoyalGorlxX: I love bread. You can make nutella sandwiches with it.

RomBoi: Exactly, and french toast.

XxObsessiveLoyalGorlxX: Put some nutella on it and then you have the ultimate breakfast.

BennyBud: I prefer Lucky Charms

RomBoi: Shut up Ben nutella french toast is better

BennyBud: Okay then I’ll just go join one of the other chats then.

            [BennyBud left the chat]

XxObsessiveLoyalGorlxX: Lucky Charms are gross.

RomBoi: I think they’re okay.

XxObsessiveLoyalGorlxX: You’re wrong.

RomBoi: No I’m partially correct

XxObsessiveLoyalGorlxX: Wanna voice chat?

RomBoi: Sure I’ll call just follow me and we can talk.

Romeo was getting excited now. He finally found someone worth talking to other than Ben. XxObsessiveLoyalGorlxX followed him and he started the chat.

“Hey there can ya hear me?” Romeo asked seeing his little icon bubble flashing green as he talked. There was several moments of silence and Romeo was starting to believe that she wasn’t there.

“Hey! I can hear you loud and clear,” she said in a cheerful happy voice. She spoke in a soft joyful voice with a sweet high tone. Romeo went silent for a few moments taking in the sound of her voice. He didn’t realize it but he was blushing like crazy. “Hello? Did you die?”

Romeo snapped out of his trance, “No! I’m alive. Your voice is so pretty. What’s your name?” he asked without thinking about what he was saying. He was too entranced by her voice and needed to hear it again.

“My name is Juliet, how about you?” Juliet, what a sweet name. It has a ring to it that Romeo loved.

“My name is Romeo. I live in New York.” Romeo told Juliet.

“I live in Oregon, you must’ve been up really late last night when you posted! Why were you up at 3 in the morning?” Juliet asked concerned. To Romeo she was absolutely adorable being so worried about him, a total stranger.

“I couldn’t sleep so I decided to make a creative post,” Romeo explained. For hours they talked and talked about random things. It was an instant connection and Romeo needed to see her. It was getting close to the end of Summer and he didn’t think he could go through another school year before meeting her.

“Hey do you think I could meet you this Saturday?” Romeo asked out of nowhere.

“I don’t know. Would it really be a good idea to come to me? You live all the way in New York and I’m over here in Oregon. Anyways my parents don’t really like how I talk to people online,” Juliet explained.

“I just have to see you though. You and me click so well. Juliet I love you and I’m going to see you,” Romeo declared.

“Okay but if you get in trouble you can’t blame me. How old are you anyways? Can you even drive?”

“I’m 17, got my drivers license last month. I can take my mom’s car since she isn’t using it anytime soon, she’s too old to drive. Can’t see a thing.” Romeo was going to see Juliet no matter what. The thought of giving her a hug is just too tempting.

“Okay then, if you can get here sure. By the way I’m only 16, but still I can’t wait to see you. I gotta go my dad is home, baaaaiiiii!” Juliet said before disconnecting and logging off leaving Romeo in silence.

To Romeo his world was anything but silent. He had Juliet’s words echoing through his mind for the rest of the day and night. Tomorrow was Friday and then the next day would be Saturday and then he could meet his angel in person. It was like a dream coming true.