A girl with a diary of pages yellowed with age, in search of herself, sitting in the oddest of places: sometimes on a staircase, sometimes at the top of a slide, sometimes on the branch of a tree; writing about life, the way she sees it.
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Hello! Since so many people are liking this story, I have decided to write a sequel, which I will be releasing soon. NO, STRIKE THAT. I'VE PUBLISHED IT!!
I can't decide the covers and want you guys to vote:
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Just for comparison, here's the cover for Old Yellow Pages:
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To be honest, I'm more inclined towards the second one. Let me know your thoughts!
The character development [9/10] had many complex traits which moved the story pretty well and developed changes in the story. The communication style, history, and background of the character were well developed. I liked it because the characters not only had strong ambitions but had flaws and their act of accepting it excited me. Plot: 10/10 I really liked the way the events in the story unfolded. Everything was on point, the beginning, the middle and the end. The ups and downs in the story were believable. The rising and falling action in the plot made the story enjoyable. POV: 10/10 The point of view was well organized and gripping. The author had done a great job. It almost felt spellbinding and captivating. There were no confusing transitions. Setting: 6/10 The setting of the book needs editing. It lacks descriptions as the book is a diary-style. The author did a great job while writing the plot but the author needs to focus on 'taking readers along the story'. While describing the imagination and creation of a scene. Style: 8/10 The writing style was captivating and had flow. There were a few typos like punctuation marks and some mission words. Also some tenses mistakes. Other than that, it was great. Theme: 10/10 I love the theme of the book. It has many life experiences explained in detail. The message delivered to the readers is clear and loud. The theme of the story is really interesting and compelling. Overall: The story is heartwarming and full of many life experiences. I enjoyed reading this book. The title did catch my eye right from the start. The plot is gripping and smooth. Everything felt real and believable. It got me hooked when the author admitted that they have flaws and are at fault. The author did not blame others for what they have been through or seen. The only thing is that this book lacks the details of the setting in the story. Other than that, this book is interesting. There were some grammatical typos but that's okay. They were not as noticeable as the way that the story unfolded was smooth. I loved reading it.
I think old yellow pages has a very unique idea, I love how it's written within the pages of a diary. It brings about a very different writing style than writing in the first person and in the moment and brings about thoughts that usually can't be expressed. You have a very good way with your words and it envokes a lot of different emotions. Some of your chapters are shorter than others (which makes sense sit is a diary but you still manage to make it count.
I will be honest with you, this story touched me. Like it actually called out to me. That perhaps, is what the author wanted it to do. The starting too was quite interesting. The main character was quite relatable for me, that's perhaps why I enjoyed it so. Awesome attempt!
