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•REVIEW 38: THRONE OF DRAGONIX (Next 5)•

Genre: fantasy
Author: Baqkns
Chapters read: next five
Trigger warnings: none so far

A mini review
Star rating: 🌟🌟🌟🌟

Note: this review may appear lengthy due to excerpts pulled from the book.

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One sacrifice is not enough.

Risa's summary: peace is a temporary offering to Dragonix as darkness threatens to fall again.
In the face of rising rebellion, preparations are in place to select a new Emperor.
But there are more camps than one, and Dragneel Bloom -- a wandering warrior -- has been summoned by the great aide.
Will she reach her destination safely?

The first time I read this book, I loved it. The second time I read this book, I loved it again.

It was delightful to get back in touch with the fiery and mysterious Bloom.
However, this time around, I found a few things worth pointing out.

The first is this tricky thing called the passive voice.
I know, very few writers may argue that it’s not that bad. My advice: run from it, and don’t you dare stop.

Why? Because you should want your reader to be present in whatever action your story has to offer, they shouldn’t be held back by avoidable/confusing complexities, and well, the passive voice serves you ‘tell’ on a golden platter.
In several areas, I was told that the character was feeling something. Quick tip: to give great novel experience, you might want to replace words like: she felt.

To me, this one example from the book stood out among others:

The tree gave a feeling of abnormality. A dark feeling to be exact.

It stood out because the first thing I thought was: no, that’s not exact.

Next point, imagine you’ve got brown hair, and of course, you know you’ve got brown hair. Now imagine we’ve been friends for a while. And I walk up to you one morning and say: hey, your hair’s brown.

I’d like to imagine your reaction.

It’s very similar to one thing several writers do: fix whatever information they feel the reader should know into dialogue, and give little or no thought to how it really fits.

Consider this excerpt from chapter five:
“Those markings on your hand emit large energy from time to time. Will it be okay for you to bandage the markings?”

The first sentence could seem like a basis for Aaron’s question, but in my opinion, the information it provided could have been woven into the story more naturally and we’d understand the question if it stood on its own after that.

One truth: cutting off parts of a story is usually difficult for writers. Second truth: it’s usually absolutely necessary.
Some words or sentences often turn out to be unnecessary.

For instance, this excerpt:

His pupils were converting into slit pupils which was an indication that he was getting angry. He didn’t look very happy…

Do you think it was necessary to add that he didn’t look very happy even after trying to show us with the first sentence?

Again, grammar was very commendable! There were a few errors but good editing would quickly fix those. I love the new cover! The book’s summary remains unclear to me.

Throne Of Dragonix is an astounding fiction you should really check out! I'd recommend this to anyone looking for something rich and different. Anyone who loves dragons or anyone who has at some point, wished to be one.

🌼 Risa Quill 🖋️

Baqkns, please let me know what you think of this mini review.