WoF OC Reviews

Needle

Name: Needle

A fair name. I don't think I've seen it before, so gj.

Name Reason: Was Hatched Very Thin; Barb Was Smaller Than Normal SandWing Barbs

Is there a reason for this deformity?

Age: 9

Okay, but do keep in mind that this means Needle is an adult and is around 19 in human maturity.

Gender: Female

Okay.

Tribe: SandWing

Sandy. But wouldn't it be SandWing/IceWing?

Rank: Peasant

pEAsaNT

Okay, lmao — having a "peasant" OC is pretty rare tbh, so gj.

Heritage: 60% SandWing 40% IceWing

How does this work

Wouldn't it be 75% SandWing and 25% IceWing?

You can't just pull numbers out of a magic bag and slap it onto genes lol

A few other things —

Why is SandWing/IceWing mixes so common? Like I see them everywhere. Everywhere.

Not a big fan of hybrids, not a big fan of extremely common hybrids, but I will say the rank and species match pretty well.

Family:

Mother: Parch

Parch is canon,

Father: Frost

And Frost is pretty overused

Hatchmates: Amber, Barb, Cactus, Cacti (Those last two are twins)

Okay no

Cacti is literally the same word as Cactus, just plural

Imagine if I have a pair of RainWing twins, and I name one Strawberry and the other one Strawberries

It's the same thing and I feel like it's kinda just an excuse to not have to come up with names

And I get that, but maybe you could at least look up different kinds of cacti?

and Pin

Twin: Pin

Oo twin

Siblings: Cicada, Heatwave, Pin

Uncles: Hyena, Jackal

Aunts: Gleam, Gila

Cousins: Lizard, Locust, and Python

Okay so overall the names are really good, just not the names of the parents and the twins Cactus and Cacti

Personality

-Is Loyal To Siblings

Always a good trait; MudWings don't have to be the only dragons loyal to their siblings

-Strong and good fighter

-Quick thinker

-Hates Thorn (Wanted Blister to win the war)

I have a feeling Mamba and Needle wouldn't get along

-Suspicious about most dragons from opposite tribes