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Thief of Scales @bclemens

Reviewer: cwang1 

Pros: 

 Your title is very interesting, and I really like it! It definitely catches my attention like a good title should. 

 I really liked your world-building, and I think you have the whole project planned out very well in your head, though I would suggest explaining it a bit better to your reader. 

 Your blurb was very interesting, and it definitely made me curious about the book. I really like how you ended the blurb as it made me and other readers curious about who saved her. 

 I really liked how all of your dialogue was really realistic, and it definitely felt like something two people might say in a conversation.

 I thought that you did a really good job conveying the emotions of the characters throughout the story, especially with their actions. 

 Cons: 

 I could barely see the other text on the cover, so I would suggest making it a different color as it doesn't really pop out right now. 

 You often misused ellipsis and you had quite a few punctuation and grammatical mistakes, so I would suggest going back and fixing that. 

 You sometimes put a space after the line of dialogue but before the quotation marks, which you don't need to do, so I would suggest just fixing that.

 I would recommend putting more about the characters' backgrounds and motives. While you do a very good job of describing the characters' emotions in the story, I would suggest putting more about what affected the characters before.

 I would suggest using a bit more complex vocabulary, as most of your vocabulary words were pretty basic. You could also try adding a bit more description, which a wider vocabulary would help with.