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Reviewer- CathrynneWolf

~PROS~

⭐️The cover of your story is absolutely astounding! Gorgeous picture! Also, thank you for giving proper credit where credit is due for this cover.

⭐️Your title perfectly fits this story! Amazing choice!

⭐️The story starts out with the main character, Kalista, looking at her clock. An unusual way of beginning it, but it does interest me, making me want to see what's going to happen further on.

⭐️As far as openings for stories go, it is very well done. it creates a curiosity in my mind, making me want to read on! The dialogue is good, and so is the description of her interest in 'werefoxes.'

⭐️I love the name, Kalista. Very original!

⭐️Your timeline adds up quite well!

~CONS~

⭐️I have no corrections or anything for the cover and title! As I said, they are VERY well done.

⭐️There are quite a few grammatical errors. Always make sure punctuation is inside the quotation marks, also, make sure there is punctuation at the end of each sentence! (EX. "I'm trying to save you." "From what?" etc.) Grammarly is a great application for small corrections like this. It works very well, I even use it myself! Your spelling is exquisite, though.

⭐️There are expressions used in your writing that would not usually be used. Such as "ugh."

⭐️Make sure your sentences are always complete! This will make your story much easier to read.

⭐️Make sure the tense you are writing in for your story is clear. This also helps your reader discern what is going on.

⭐️Also, make sure to describe things! Sometimes, there is no need to, but characters and places (Such as the grandma, kitchen, and her room) could use more of it to help he reader picture them clearly in their mind.

Other than these things, this story is very well done. Great job, @ZeeyWrites !

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