×. ❜Redemption JJK [Rev. Blazé]

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Book Name: Redemption | J

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Book Name: Redemption | J.JK

Author: _WildStar_

Reviewer: Blazè ( -taeyze- )

Cover: 2/5
- Honestly, except for the fonts, nothing looks good to me. The image taken isn't suitable either. The color scheme is pleasing, but it will be better to take another picture of Jungkook since this doesn't give off the vibes from the story.

Title: 4/5
- The title suits perfectly. But the subtitle that you put in doesn't quite settle here.

Synopsis: 8/10
- The content and length are pretty fine, and I like it too. And I see that you have used text designing in the blurb, but it doesn't seem that pleasing to the eyes... Also, I think you should remove the last part where it's written that it's a short story in Jungkook's POV and stuff. It's better to include that in the Author's note along with the other information you have given.

Execution: 5/10
- The efforts and ideas that you wanted to put forth are really appreciatable. A short story idea with a nice backstory is less to be seen. I actually liked how you put it, but there were some errors. Like you could've made things clearer. At some points, it was unclear and caused confusion too. Especially in the last chapter. And putting the characters into action wasn't carried out well either.

Plot: 14/20
- The plot was pretty simple. Nothing much was there. It had a simple motive, put in a flashback form. Resentment is okay, but it was a bit... weird? I'm not sure how to put this but... the part where Jungkook finds his mate and she wants to kill him and stuff... was a bit off from the story. It felt like a plothole. Also, the guilt felt very cliché.

Writing Style: 14/20
- The writing style was good enough. But like I mentioned above, there wasn't much in the plot so the writing style was easily and nicely put to execution. But again, there were some times when the writing style didn't stand out and instead sounded boring. You can try putting more elements in the story or change it a bit. Also, when changing the time setting, or doing a time skip use some lines or symbols in the center between the paragraphs instead of writing that there's a change of setting.

Grammar & Vocabulary: 17/20
- There aren't any grammatical errors except for a few places, that are almost negligible. The vocabulary is also good, there isn't a repetition of the words, which is a good point. But some words are used in an improper way, they might mean the same but they aren't used the same way.

Characters & Development: 3/10
- There isn't really any character development, honestly. And Jungkook's emotional development of resentment and guilt is very weird to read. Weird in the sense, that it isn't specified clearly in the book what exactly happened to him and his mate. And I kinda don't like the way his feelings turned out. A character is the main element of any book and creating the character and the development in their feelings and surroundings and their adapting is what makes a book and plot creative. In your book, however, I didn't see the character standing out. A character is what makes the story so just making a plot and putting a character won't work. Creating a character and putting the story around them is what needs to be done. I hope you think about this and work on it since I know it's not easy to create a character.

Total: 67/100

Final note: I did like it but I didn't enjoy it much since it just felt weird and unfitting at points. The start was kinda good but as it reached the end, it just felt like a haze. But I think that it can be done better and I hope you take these points in a positive way!

 But I think that it can be done better and I hope you take these points in a positive way!

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