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×. ❜Ended [Rev. JK]

Book Name: Ended : The tale of Heer & Ranjha

Author: Meinmydeluluworld

reviewer: JK [ AuthorAlphaJK ]

Cover - ⅗

The title is too small to be able to read or to catch the attention of the viewer. It's too simple as well. I'd suggest you get a new cover made, something with more elements & vibrant fonts. You can consider ordering a cover from our Bellatrix Graphic Shop. 

Title - ⅗

 Quite long. You can prefer a different word, possibly a synonym for the word ‘Ended’ in the title, something unique yet similar.

Synopsis - 8/10

Quite good. There are barely any grammatical mistakes. However, it gives out too much from the book, shorten it a little and also try to add a few questions which could provoke curiosity for the readers. 

Execution -  10/10

For the 3 chapters so far, the buildup and flow is smooth. 

Plot - 10/20

There isn't much to say, the story is either incomplete or has many more upcoming chapters. I'd suggest you to apply for review after posting more. If the oneshot ends here, then you need to reveal a lot of things, for example, the message hidden by the female protagonist's friend or the exact reason for the male protagonist's death. Did he actually die? Why? How? Was she aware of the reason? From here on, I hope you keep the flow and construct a firm plot with some cliffhangers and plot twists. 

Writing Style - 20/20

It's beautiful. Your word construction is absolutely excellent. You've also chosen quite sophisticated phrases for the book. 

Grammar and Vocabulary - 20/20

I didn't really find many grammatical errors. The vocabulary is top notch. 

Characters and Development - 7/10

Not full marks because I'm not satisfied with what's already written about the characters, I want to know more. Their pure love and adoration is amazingly written, however, I wonder how they fell in love? What kind of person were they before and after they fell in love? More specifications would be great, unless you intend to leave it for the reader's imagination. Readers are often lazy, we expect much more past and future references. 

Total - 81/100

Final Note: It was a good read, though incomplete. I'd suggest you apply for review after writing a little more, if possible. You have the skill to write. Both your vocabulary and poetry are excellent and perfect to the point it made me wonder if it's AI or something. *chuckles* Just kidding, don't mind it. Good work. Keep it up & all the best on finishing the book.