ꗃ﹕❜ Minerva ❯❯ A review shop [2.0]

×. ❜Till sunrise [Rev. JK]

Book Name: Till sunrise
Author: ValerieEveDiestro
reviewer: JK [ AuthorAlphaJK ]

Cover - 4.5/5

The cover portrays a very important event from the oneshot itself, giving it a meaningful essence. Quite pleasing to look at.

Title - 5/5
Aesthetic & simple. It suits the book well.

Synopsis - 10/10

It has the perfect cliffhanger that'd make the readers curious to click on the “read” option. No grammatical errors or information dump. Good.

Execution - 9.5/10

The oneshot is beautifully written. You did justice to the story.

Plot - 19/20

I believe you could've given the readers an insight of the mysterious girl, but again, you intended to leave it for the readers imagination. It could be celine? But she's gone? Did she somehow survive? But the mysterious girl sounded like the younger version of Celine? You also gave possible hints of her not being Celine, like the coffee and pinky promise references. Great work.

Writing Style - 18/20

Simple and elegant. I loved how your oneshot is in simple english with not many sophisticated phrases, yet delivering dialogues and describing situations so well. I especially loved the description of Chester's mother's hand in the hospital.

Grammar and Vocabulary - 17/20

Avoid repeating similar phrases and words. For example, the dialogue below:

“I will be back home in just a few minutes! Just going to the nearest street just a few walks away!”

“I will be back home in a few minutes! Going to the nearest street just a few walks away!”

Add comma instead of full stops when adding a dialogue within a paragraph. For example:

I took my phone, pressed the number I knew so well, and called her. “Hello. I'm here. Do you see …me?”

I took my phone, pressed the number I knew so well, and called *her, “Hello. I'm here. Do you see …me?”

Also, in another example below, a comma is needed for proper delivery of the sentence.

I didn't hear her reply not until she told me,

I didn't hear her *reply, not until she told me,

Characters and Development - 9/10

Both Chester and Celine are wholesome, so are their memories. The mysterious girl deserves some spotlight too.

Total - 92/100

Final Note: I'm not a fan of oneshots because they often fail to feed my curiosity and interests, they're almost as if the whole information is being dumped on me within a paragraph. However, your one shot was one of the few I'd ever remember. It was an amazing read. The book gave me a sense of calmness and the flow of the book soothed me. Beautifully done. Good work.