Wow I have never read a game fan-fiction before but, I LOVE CALL OF DUTY.
Things I didn't like:
*Was the first page a Prologue? I wasn't sure exactly, because, it just said the title again. Maybe, since you are using numbers as the chapter names you could put "The Begining" Or something like that? Just a suggestion.:)
Things I did like:
*IT'S ONE OF THE BEST FUCKING GAMES EVER AND IT HAS BEEN TURNED INTO A FANFICTION. CAN WE JUST HAVE A MOMENT OF SILENCE.
*The main character is very strong willed and determined. I love how she isn't some girl running around yelling and screaming. -_-
*Your detail is amazing and flows very well, with your story. It makes the reader feel like they can picture everything.
*Your cover it's simple yet, it gives off your story plot. Good job with that.
Overall, I give this a 5/5 star rating. Keep up the good work! I voted!:)
