Things I didn't like:
*Your chapters seemed a bit rushed. You could try putting some more detail to fill it that would help. It would also make your chapters longer.:)
Things I did like:
* THERE IS LIKE SO MUCH DRAMA BETWEEN DANIELLA AND CLAYBOURNE. JUST AHHH. *fangirls everywhere* Erm...right....
* I love the part when Daniella snoops on the man and woman in the ballroom! I literally told my computer "Oh shit. Get away from the dam door!" And... yes I have problems.
Overall, I give this story a 4/5 rating. Your plot is great you just need to add some filler and such.
OH. AND PRETTY LITTLE LIARS FAN HERE. *high fives*
