Things I didn't like:
* I think you rushed things a bit. Maybe you could go back read through it and add more details? It just seems like everything is happening so fast.
*The songs used as the titles is something that is very overused in fan-fictions. I only have one used as a title because, otherwise it can make your book seem generic.
*Add more detail! Please! Think about it this way, what can your character smell, hear, see and touch? Use your five senses! This will add some filler to your chapters and make them longer.
*It's a Harry/ Zayn book right? So, why is just Zayn on the cover? It makes the reader feel like Zayn gets the girl in the end. Which I hope he does but, you can't give the ending away just yet!
Things I did like:
*You added humor to the story and not the same old carrot jokes.
*You kept the same pace throughout the story even though it was short.
Overall, I give you 2/5 stars. Just fix those things. Good job otherwise!:D
