The Light Of A Devil

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Things I didn't like:

*You change tenses a lot and it can disract the reader from what's actullay happening.

*I suggest getting a editor for your grammer and punctuation. I'm no grammer natzi but, I did spot a few. 

*Some of the things you described didn't make much sense. Why was Avena so, calm when James was holding a knife? I mean I would be freaking out and runing for the hills. Just little things like that don't make much sense.

Things I did like:

*You kept the same flow throughout the story. It's easier to stay on track that way.

Overall, I give you 2/5 stars. You need to fix a lot though. Other than that keep writing you have a good plot going there!

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