My Immortal (Abducted by Grammar Nazis)

Chapter 1

My Immortal

(Edited)

{LAAN: Alright Outcasts 'n' Company (do you like that? I think I'm keeping that for my followers' term), it's meeeee. Okay, I'm sure you've heard of My Immortal. It's a fan-fiction... A very bad fan-fiction and reading it and listening to YouTubers read it, I have seen the worst spelling. Ever. Being a Grammar Nazi reading/listening to it gave me a headache and I wanted to puke. So decided to get the fic and edit it. I'm not editing the whole story, just spelling and grammar errors and translating the Author's Notes.

So, I don't own this and after every chapter I'll post a new part with the list of all the corrections I did. My own comments and translations will be in these brackets: { } and my own Notes will look like this: LAAN. I'll try to censor things because I want to keep this clean...ish. If you see something that I missed, tell me and I'll fix it. Well... I hope the corrections will help us understand the story...}

Chapter 1

AN: Special fangz (get it, coz Im goffik) 2 my gf (ew not in that way) raven, bloodytearz666 4 helpin me wif da story and spelling. U rok! Justin ur da luv of my deprzzing life u rok 2! MCR ROX!

{Translation: Special "fangz" (get it, 'cause I'm gothic) {Be prepared for "Goth" Referances} to my girlfriend (Ew, not in that way) Raven, bloodytearz666, for helping me with the story and spelling. You rock! Justin you're the love of my depressing life, you rock too! {Who's Justin?} MCR {My Chemical Romance} Rocks!}

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Hi my name is Ebony Darkness Dementia Raven Way and I have long ebony black with purple streaks and red tips that reaches my mid-back and icy blue eyes like limpid tears. A lot of people tell me I look like Amy Lee (AN: if u don't know who she is get da hell out of here!) {Trans: If you don't know who she is get the hell out of here!}. I'm not related to Gerard Way but I wish I was because he's a major f***ing hottie.

I'm a vampire but my teeth are straight and white. {Do you see the logic of this?} I have pale white skin. I'm also a witch, and I go to a magic school called Hogwarts in England {Hogwarts is in Scotland} where I'm in the seventh year; I'm seventeen. I'm goth and I wear mostly black. I love Hot Topic and I buy all my clothes from there. For example, today I was wearing a black corset with matching lace around it, a black leather miniskirt, pink fishnets and black combat boots. I was wearing black lipstick, white foundation, black eyeliner and red eye shadow. I was walking outside Hogwarts. It was snowing and raining so there was no sun, which I was very happy about. A lot of preps stared at me. I put up my middle finger at them.

"Hey Ebony!" shouted a voice. I looked up. It was Draco Malfoy!

"What's up Draco?" I asked.

"Nothing." he said shyly.

But then, I heard my friends call me and I had to go away.

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AN: IS it good? PLZ tell me fangz!

{Trans: Is it good? Please tell me. Thanks!}

{LAAN: How am I doing? Tell me if I missed something. Fangz! Get it? Cuz I'm making fun of her!}