My Immortal
(Edited)
{LAAN: Alright Outcasts 'n' Company (do you like that? I think I'm keeping that for my followers' term), it's meeeee. Okay, I'm sure you've heard of My Immortal. It's a fan-fiction... A very bad fan-fiction and reading it and listening to YouTubers read it, I have seen the worst spelling. Ever. Being a Grammar Nazi reading/listening to it gave me a headache and I wanted to puke. So decided to get the fic and edit it. I'm not editing the whole story, just spelling and grammar errors and translating the Author's Notes.
So, I don't own this and after every chapter I'll post a new part with the list of all the corrections I did. My own comments and translations will be in these brackets: { } and my own Notes will look like this: LAAN. I'll try to censor things because I want to keep this clean...ish. If you see something that I missed, tell me and I'll fix it. Well... I hope the corrections will help us understand the story...}
Chapter 1
AN: Special fangz (get it, coz Im goffik) 2 my gf (ew not in that way) raven, bloodytearz666 4 helpin me wif da story and spelling. U rok! Justin ur da luv of my deprzzing life u rok 2! MCR ROX!
{Translation: Special "fangz" (get it, 'cause I'm gothic) {Be prepared for "Goth" Referances} to my girlfriend (Ew, not in that way) Raven, bloodytearz666, for helping me with the story and spelling. You rock! Justin you're the love of my depressing life, you rock too! {Who's Justin?} MCR {My Chemical Romance} Rocks!}
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Hi my name is Ebony Darkness Dementia Raven Way and I have long ebony black with purple streaks and red tips that reaches my mid-back and icy blue eyes like limpid tears. A lot of people tell me I look like Amy Lee (AN: if u don't know who she is get da hell out of here!) {Trans: If you don't know who she is get the hell out of here!}. I'm not related to Gerard Way but I wish I was because he's a major f***ing hottie.
I'm a vampire but my teeth are straight and white. {Do you see the logic of this?} I have pale white skin. I'm also a witch, and I go to a magic school called Hogwarts in England {Hogwarts is in Scotland} where I'm in the seventh year; I'm seventeen. I'm goth and I wear mostly black. I love Hot Topic and I buy all my clothes from there. For example, today I was wearing a black corset with matching lace around it, a black leather miniskirt, pink fishnets and black combat boots. I was wearing black lipstick, white foundation, black eyeliner and red eye shadow. I was walking outside Hogwarts. It was snowing and raining so there was no sun, which I was very happy about. A lot of preps stared at me. I put up my middle finger at them.
"Hey Ebony!" shouted a voice. I looked up. It was Draco Malfoy!
"What's up Draco?" I asked.
"Nothing." he said shyly.
But then, I heard my friends call me and I had to go away.
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AN: IS it good? PLZ tell me fangz!
{Trans: Is it good? Please tell me. Thanks!}
{LAAN: How am I doing? Tell me if I missed something. Fangz! Get it? Cuz I'm making fun of her!}
ESTÁS LEYENDO
My Immortal (Abducted by Grammar Nazis)
FanfictionPlease don't "sue" me. (Buh-Dum- CRASH) Warning! This fiction is so bad! Side effects may include shuddering, anger, disbelief, nausea, headaches, brain farts, brain explosions, eye strains, IQ loss and overall mind pain. I'm not responsible for an...