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- Reviewer Koo -
Book cover ::7/10 Your book cover gives some information about what the theme of the story is, so it's okay. But in all honesty, it could've been more edited. The title of the book could've been in a more eye-catching style. And the subtitle was not very visible. So, I would suggest re-doing it with better fonts.
Title :: 7/10The book title is pretty unique and a reader would probably like to know more about it as you have used a new term 'Blueties' which is something different. But at the same time, you could've given the title a fancy name, something uncommon.
Description :: 12/15 The description was good and it didn't give away much, and it made me want to know more about the story. But you could've avoided giving the excerpts of a conversation between the beast [??] and Jimin and concentrated more on the summary.
Storyline :: 14/20 Your story has an intriguing plot. But at many places I found myself losing interest because some parts were not explained well. I also found myself being confused because I couldn't understand what you meant to portray. Though there was not any cringe content within; if you could make your scenes clearer, I feel it would have been a great story.
Dialogue delivery :: 11/15 The dialogues were okay, but there was nothing very deep about it. If your dialogues make your readers want to quote them, then you've created a deep impression. But in your dialogues, I found none of that factor. I'm not asking you to give a deep ass inner meaning to all your dialogues, but they should have something substantial about them.
Grammar and Vocabulary :: 11/20 There were grammar mistakes and they were eye-catching. Like, for instance, you made some mistakes in pronouns and tenses. Punctuations were fine. Some words were wrongly spelled. And you also used short forms like 'tho'; which you should not. You should not use abbreviations because many people may not know their full form and often get confused about what the word means. That can hamper the real meaning of the story. For that reason, using abbreviations should be avoided. Your vocabulary also has lots of space for improvement. There were many places where you could've used a unique word that would've explained the situation well and saved you from writing numerous unnecessary words.
TOTAL :: 67/100
Weaknesses and strengths :: Your weakness, as I feel, is grammar and vocabulary, and ability to describe a situation. If you could improve that and rewrite the story once more, I'm pretty sure it would be a great story. Your strength, of course, is your imagination. You have not used a common trope but something of your own I suppose. I didn't find any sort of negative cliché in your story though. So that's a plus.
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