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- Reviewer Icy -
𝙲𝚘𝚟𝚎𝚛 :: 8/10 I like the cover, however Yoongi's figure has to be blended in more with the background. In addition, I recommend that you use a different font. Perhaps serif? Or something along those lines.
𝚃𝚒𝚝𝚕𝚎 :: 4.5/5 Short and to the point. It appeals to me.
𝙱𝚕𝚞𝚛𝚋 :: 7.5/10 I'd recommend presenting a tiny scene from the story in the blurb and then adding a brief plot summary in the last paragraph you wrote. With the current one, it doesn't feel as inviting. It has grammatical errors as well, so don't forget to correct these as well.
𝙿𝚕𝚘𝚝 𝙰𝚗𝚍 𝚃𝚠𝚒𝚜𝚝𝚜 :: 20/25 It's still a work in progress, but I like the premise and series so far. There is a small flaw, such as why would Yoongi want to look into a suicide case? Aside fro that, I'm really liking the route this story is taking. Of course, it will be revealed that Jimin was murdered, so that isn't a surprise. I have a few ideas, such as Hoseok being the killer and purposefully approaching Yoongi to receive the pleasure of seeing Yoongi concerned, and so on. I liked how you incorporated paranormal activities, however I think it was a little too unexpected. That portion has to be polished out a little more. The plot flows well, but the pace appears to be too quick at first. Slow down and narrate what happened, as if Yoongi was in the cab and observed police cars approaching Jimin's house. You completely missed the point where he got out of the cab in the next line, where he kneels before the body. That scenario should be added since it would be able to express Yoongi's anxiety. Also, make Jimin's death more recent because, in my opinion, it makes no sense for Yoongi to pursue a 5 year old case with such a lame explanation. Unless you have a unique spin on it.
𝙲𝚑𝚊𝚛𝚊𝚌𝚝𝚎𝚛𝚜 𝙰𝚗𝚍 𝙴𝚖𝚘𝚝𝚒𝚘𝚗𝚜 :: 5/10 The characters are adequate, yet they are nonetheless drab and uninteresting. They don't thrill me in the least. You should definitely include some more personality in them. Because the feelings are portrayed too quickly, I'm not sure what transpired by the end of the paragraph. Take your time describing events, situations, and other details.
𝚆𝚛𝚒𝚝𝚒𝚗𝚐 𝚂𝚝𝚢𝚕𝚎 :: 13/15 I enjoy your writing style, yet you leave out important details. Your writing style is odd in a nice manner, as if I comprehend what you're saying but your words make no sense at the same time. It could be due to the grammatical issues, but you need to elaborate a little more. Look for synonyms, apply creative phrases and idioms, and so forth. Make your drab writing a little more interesting to read. But it's simple to read, and I like it.
𝙶𝚛𝚊𝚖𝚖𝚊𝚛 𝙰𝚗𝚍 𝚅𝚘𝚌𝚊𝚋𝚞𝚕𝚊𝚛𝚢 :: 12/20 I noticed some grammatical and punctuation issues, so review your chapters before uploading them. Your vocabulary jumps from good to advanced to good again. You start with simple words and then use a word that a student with a PhD in English will recognize in the middle. Maintain a consistent approach to this. Use simple or sophisticated words, and if you want it mixed up, don't put it in all at once. Before moving on to simpler words in the next paragraph, use it for at least one paragraph.
𝚁𝚎𝚟𝚒𝚎𝚠𝚎𝚛'𝚜 𝚃𝚑𝚘𝚞𝚐𝚑𝚝𝚜 :: 3/5 It's my kind of book, and while I don't dig for your writing style, I enjoyed reading it.
𝐓𝐨𝐭𝐚𝐥 :: 73/100
𝐒𝐭𝐫𝐞𝐧𝐠𝐭𝐡𝐬 𝐀𝐧𝐝 𝐖𝐞𝐚𝐤𝐧𝐞𝐬𝐬𝐞𝐬 :: Except for the grammar, I wouldn't call anything your strengths. You may say that your plot is your greatest attribute.
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