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- Reviewer May -
𝙲𝚘𝚟𝚎𝚛 :: 8.5/10 The color of the font is too light and it almost blends in with the background, so, it's better to choose a darker color for it. The blurb and title make it look like a badass story but the cover says something else.
𝚃𝚒𝚝𝚕𝚎 :: 3.5/5 It's interesting, I'll give you that, but it isn't rare. I have seen books with similar names and a plotline which wasn't much deviated from yours. Since it matches your plot and it's the main thing the plot revolves around, it's okay.
𝙱𝚕𝚞𝚛𝚋 :: 8/10 It's short and has grammar mistakes. It would be best to add a short synopsis of your story. The dialogues are interesting though, so keep that.
𝙿𝚕𝚘𝚝 𝙰𝚗𝚍 𝚃𝚠𝚒𝚜𝚝𝚜 :: 17/25 Too fast, you need to slow down and explain properly. I didn't understand what happened after the female lead stood in front of the class and introduced herself. It was really confusing for me so slow down and explain the events properly or else you'll have plot holes. Many of your reactions, events, etc. are so fictional, they don't even begin to touch reality. Twists...they all feel common to me.
𝙲𝚑𝚊𝚛𝚊𝚌𝚝𝚎𝚛𝚜 𝙰𝚗𝚍 𝙴𝚖𝚘𝚝𝚒𝚘𝚗𝚜 :: 5/10 Your sentence structures don't allow me to feel any emotions. It's so confusing with the way you write your narration. You need to improve your sentence structures. The character is confusing as well. The female lead is from an all-girls school and she's not confident according to the narration, so, I don't know how she was able to go in front of the whole class room and talk like that as well. She's supposed to be proper, according to the narration, but she curses a hell lot and in everything. I don't think she should be called a "perv" for staring, it would be more like "creep". She was going okay but then suddenly turned into a pervert? You have to slowly develop her character 'she stares at the guy and then he looks at her and smirks, she blushes and looks away embarrassed' something like this was expected at the beginning of the chapter. Since the male lead is kind of a cold type of guy, he wasn't supposed to lose his composure in front of everyone.
𝚆𝚛𝚒𝚝𝚒𝚗𝚐 𝚂𝚝𝚢𝚕𝚎 :: 10/15 It's good but at the same time, confusing. Some of your sentences don't make sense. Like the scolding of the teacher in the first chapter or the lunch part.
𝙶𝚛𝚊𝚖𝚖𝚊𝚛 𝙰𝚗𝚍 𝚅𝚘𝚌𝚊𝚋𝚞𝚕𝚊𝚛𝚢 :: 15/20 Too many paragraphs, make it less please. You also don't put full stops/periods after ending the paragraphs. The sentence grammar is okay. You overuse this punctuation "!" when you can simply use periods (before action tags) and commas (before verbal tags) in the sentences. Vocabulary is simple but you have to have some richness in your vocabulary. Read New York seller books of different genres and authors. It will help you improve your grammar, vocabulary and writing style.
𝚁𝚎𝚟𝚒𝚎𝚠𝚎𝚛'𝚜 𝚃𝚑𝚘𝚞𝚐𝚑𝚝𝚜 :: 2/5 I do enjoy it but you have to have a touch of reality to your book, nothing makes sense. It's so confusing. I don't know how she managed to do all that fighting and I don't know why she is so hell bent on making Airi think that Kai flirted with her and the face you used in your cover is not Kai! It's Song Kang! I don't know where you got Kai from, it really kinda offended me... so please fix this. She developed too fast, she was shy and looking down the first few paragraphs into the story and now she's fighting, the plot is way too fast. It makes me not want to read it.
𝐓𝐨𝐭𝐚𝐥 :: 69/100
𝐒𝐭𝐫𝐞𝐧𝐠𝐭𝐡𝐬 𝐀𝐧𝐝 𝐖𝐞𝐚𝐤𝐧𝐞𝐬𝐬𝐞𝐬 :: Your story has a lot of holes in it and major time skips with the way you represent your dialogues. The only strengths you have are the title, blurb and the cover, the rest being your weaknesses. You can improve, it's easy but it takes a lot of patience as well. So, good luck!
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