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-Reviewer May-
Book cover- 5.5/10
The cover is attractive but mismatching with the plot. I feel like a lighter color would've been more suitable for the title's font color because the color you've used doesn't make the cover stand out in any way. Though Taehyung's red eyes look sad, the cover overall doesn't give much sad vibes. This might be due to the wrong selection or wrong placement of the picture. My opinion on how the cover could've been remade is that the title could've been placed in the middle. A picture of Taehyung with a sad face facing front could've been used below the title and a picture of Tae and the female lead facing each other could've been used in the upper part.
Title- 9.5/10
Using a unique word rather than the common ones does attract readers to know more about the story. Good job with that.
Description- 14/15
Your blurb could've passed for a really good one if not for the few grammatical errors. It is successful in making the readers want to know more about the plot. The last line is soo well written, that it gives chills to the one reading.
Storyline- 18/20
The pace is moderate and enjoyable. The interactions between the characters are pretty good. I'm having high hopes for the upcoming chapters because I want to know about the plot twist you're planning. I suggest you don't drop any twists that are disease-related or like her parents threatening her, because these kinds of surprises are the ones that all writers want to do. I hope it's unique.
Characters- 6/10
Characters like Hana, who often make decisions for others' lives by themselves, are good enough to anger the readers and make us dislike them. Those kinds of characters scream selfishness, but not only are those types of characters a perfect fit to the story, but also it shows how you were able to create a character well, providing distinguishable traits. More of character development is yet to be seen as the story is still ongoing.
Dialogue delivery- 13/15
All dialogues make sense and they blend well with normality. But, I did notice a few grammar mistakes in some places. For example, I found a sentence called, "Did you took your medicine?" It is grammatically incorrect. It should've been "Have you taken your medicine?"
Grammar and vocabulary- 17/20
In a few places, I found you using periods (full stops) before verbal tags. One example from your story would be,
"Yes, I am. We should break up." I stated....
The right thing to do would've been replacing the period with a comma because 'stated' is a verbal tag and so is 'murmured'. Kindly keep in mind the grammatical rule that periods should always be used before an action tag. Also, I found you using a lot of unwanted additional words in a few places. Your usage of ellipsis was also wrong. You used 4 dots for ellipses, which should've been three. Flattered by your title, I thought you would have a good wide range of vocabulary but it seems that you still have a lot to improve. Maybe your limited vocabulary is the reason that you weren't able to portray emotions realistically. I would suggest you read a lot of English novels with strong vocabulary. And you can use alternative synonyms for many common words like 'cry', 'walk' or so on because a good vocabulary in your book makes a good impression on readers. It not only helps in learning more words but also your emotions can be executed better.
Total- 83/100
Strengths and weaknesses
Your writing style is really good and I was mesmerized, wanting to read more and more of your work. The only thing you should take into consideration is your finite vocabulary range. A good vocabulary is the least required standard that you need to portray emotions well. So, kindly consider the suggestions I gave you and best of luck!
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