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- Reviewer May -
𝙲𝚘𝚟𝚎𝚛:: 8/10
The cover is not bad. I felt like it was a bit too depressing. The title didn't give me the vibes I was expecting and neither did the blurb so maybe go for a bit colourful one the next time. The title was good, but you should not write it in the middle, cutting right through Jin's face on the cover. Plus, if it's just a Jin fanfiction, then the cover is appropriate, but as your blurb claims it to be "Jin ' OC x Yoongi", while the title says " KSJ", this makes it confusing for the readers, so do clear that up.
If it's just a Jin fanfiction, write "Jin x OC" and keep Jin as the face claim but if it is not then I would recommend adding Yoongi.
𝚃𝚒𝚝𝚕𝚎:: 4/5
It was a beautiful title and I loved it. It was really attractive but please maintain the capitalization. Write it as "Retrouvaille (the symbol) K.SJ.".
𝙱𝚕𝚞𝚛𝚋:: 7.5/10
I would have liked it better if you had added a small but interesting dialogue from the story and framed that paragraph more adequately. What I mean to say is that the blurb would have been even more attractive had it been slightly bigger, like 2 or 3 paragraphs.
𝙿𝚕𝚘𝚝 𝙰𝚗𝚍 𝚃𝚠𝚒𝚜𝚝𝚜:: 21/25
I loved reading the plot. Even though the genre and concept were not unique you managed to make the story unique with your talent. I loved how you introduced the characters' lives before making them meet up.
I did not find any twists in your story other than, of course, the common health problem, so I do hope you have something good in store.
𝙲𝚑𝚊𝚛𝚊𝚌𝚝𝚎𝚛𝚜 𝙰𝚗𝚍 𝙴𝚖𝚘𝚝𝚒𝚘n𝚜:: 8.5/10
The emotions weren't that well written in my opinion. Maybe you wrote as much as you could, but I felt as if you lacked in the vocabulary section. Perhaps this was why the emotions weren't conveyed across. The characters are good and I did see development, they suited the plotline.
𝚆𝚛𝚒𝚝𝚒𝚗𝚐 𝚂𝚝𝚢𝚕𝚎:: 13.5/15
It was really beautiful and descriptive. It was so good that I was rendered speechless, but over-describing some things, made it boring in a few places. Like the plane scene, I didn't feel her emotions much because you over-described everything. If you had kept it slightly simpler, then it would have been better. It was good the way it was, but you can get better. I loved your style though.
𝙶𝚛𝚊𝚖𝚖𝚊𝚛 𝙰𝚗𝚍 𝚅𝚘𝚌𝚊𝚋𝚞𝚕𝚊𝚛𝚢:: 18.5/20
Everything is nearly perfect here except the vocabulary. It was not rich and does not compliment the writing style. Read more extensively and learn from around you. It will help your vocabulary.
𝚁𝚎𝚟𝚒𝚎𝚠𝚎𝚛'𝚜 𝚃𝚑𝚘𝚞𝚐𝚑𝚝𝚜:: 3/5
𝐓𝐨𝐭𝐚𝐥:: 84.5/100
𝐒𝐭𝐫𝐞𝐧𝐠𝐭𝐡𝐬 𝐀𝐧𝐝 𝐖𝐞𝐚𝐤𝐧𝐞𝐬𝐬𝐞𝐬 :: I liked it but I found it over descriptive in places which made me lose interest, but I still liked it. I really wanted the book to have a rich vocabulary though. Your strength would be your writing style, grammar and plot line but your weakness is your vocabulary which is one of the major shortcomings so please do look into it.
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