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- Reviewer Cass -

COVER: 9/10
The cover is very appealing and attractive. It will take the readers a considerable amount of deliberation to scroll past something as well-done as such. I can compose absolutely no amends to be implemented in the cover. However, you must remember that this cannot be the apex. One could always make changes here and there to make it more appealing.

TITLE: 2/5
While the cover was extremely engrossing, the title was rather insipid. It does not possess any conspicuous connections with the plot, and seems somewhat inapt. Try investing a little more intellect for the title, and choose a more opposite one; one that would efficiently intrigue the audience into the story.

BLURB: 6/10
Honestly speaking, the blurb did not quite get me hooked, and it felt very introverted. Perhaps you can try canceling out the descriptive accounts to an extent. Inflating the blurb with excessive descriptions makes the plot seem even more complex than it actually is. I cannot envision a larger mass intently reading big, elaborate blurbs. Try making it concise and crisp. The first half of the blurb seems inviting enough; you can consider cutting corners in the latter half.

PLOTS & TWISTS: 20/25
You have chosen a very complex base to act upon, and I must admit, that you have conveyed the plot in a very efficient and intriguing manner. The story, though not resplendent with twists and intricacies, sufficed to keep the readers glued. From an individualized perspective, I have always enjoyed ethereal and unworldly plots. However, I suppose I can safely assert that the ones who have barely commenced reading plots from the said genre will find this appealing too. I was compelled to decrement five points, owing to my previous observation that the story was not quite resplendent with twist (which is quite common in complex plots) and could be more convoluted. This change is not mandatory, but I would certainly recommend you to do so.

CHARACTERS & EMOTIONS: 9/10
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ll the characters were excellently portrayed, and the emotions competently delivered. This, in my opinion, was quite a notable feature of this fan-fiction. This opens us to a stage, where we can differentiate between characters, not only by their names, but also by their personae. Owing to the remarkable writing style (which will be further discussed), the story satiated its purpose of imprinting us, and enabling us to acquire all emotions requisite.

WRITING STYLE: 13/15
I truly adore the writing style. Excellent use of vocabulary, accurate pacing, and even distribution of these two aspects; these all resided in your writing style. However, coming to the demerits, though your writing was accurate and apt, it lacked uniqueness and creativity. This might come off as a rather odd observation to you, but I genuinely believe that a competent writer like you could customize your writing style, and make it submerge from the masses.

GRAMMAR AND VOCABULARY: 19/20
It was brilliant; one of the best-written stories I have read lately. I could spot hardly any errors, and hence, cannot prescribe any modifications. I could spot a handful, but they can be easily eradicated, and were possibly generated due to the lack of proof-reading. Now, addressing your vocabulary, you have a good amount of words in it, and you know how to implement them. However, a select few sections of the story seemed a tad bit too ornate, while others seemed a bit too bland. Perhaps you can fix this according to your own taste by proof-reading the story intently.

REVIEWER’S THOUGHTS: 4.5/5
I personally enjoyed reading this story. Despite the aforementioned flaws, the story is beautiful, and I will certainly await more from you. I hope my review will contribute to enhancing the story further.

TOTAL: 82.5/100
 

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