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- Reviewer Mickey and Vesper -
𝙲𝚘𝚟𝚎𝚛 :: 7/10 •The picture is actually really pretty and the fonts and editing really go well with each other but, the theme vibes the story gives feels really different from the cover. The covers seems like a fantasy story when it's not. Still, it is beautiful so it's not too bad. • Fonts and color scheme (author's name) does not match and seems out of the context.
𝚃𝚒𝚝𝚕𝚎 :: 3/5 • Not creative or alluring enough to catch one's attention. • Seems grammatically wrong as well, we use "yet" at the start or end of certain sentences like that. And having it in middle, does not sound that good. • Though it has relevance with the story, a better and more attractive title/term could have been used for the title, judging the story plot.
𝙱𝚕𝚞𝚛𝚋 :: 5/10 •The blurb is long but it doesn't really tell anything about the story, not in a good way. The blurbs seems more too much into Alyssa the their story, it's enough but if at the end you add a little something related to Nick maybe? The description comes off a little cliché. • Grammatical errors — tense is mismatched in some places. •Though, the length is good. Not too much or less.
𝙿𝚕𝚘𝚝 𝙰𝚗𝚍 𝚃𝚠𝚒𝚜𝚝𝚜 :: 16/25 •Pace is not really that fast and the sense is great. The concept isn't really big or unique as it was kinda expected but is still better. and social message sent by the plot (if any); how early the characters met and how unique was their introduction to each other; how unique were the plot twists. • Execution is good but still could have been better.
𝙲𝚑𝚊𝚛𝚊𝚌𝚝𝚎𝚛𝚜 𝙰𝚗𝚍 𝙴𝚖𝚘𝚝𝚒𝚘𝚗𝚜 :: 4/10 •I like that the character development isn't so sudden, they develop slowly and steadily. they blend with the plot pretty greatly. The emotions weren't portrayed at the chapters much and it was kinda weird, I mean the time of when her parents passed away you didn't show much about her emotions and stuff just a hint, which was off. Some parts looked logical while some felt so weird to be a coincidence so heads up to that. And there was very less of the character's together time at the starting so it felt out of blue later. • Descriptions were good but upto the mark as it was supposed to be. • Emotions were good but was not able to connect myself with them often. Something is missing.
𝚆𝚛𝚒𝚝𝚒𝚗𝚐 𝚂𝚝𝚢𝚕𝚎 :: 9/15 •It isn't very simple but has some good descriptions but its less describing of emotions, your writing style when I saw it felt like you're a writer for a while, it's good but a little improvement will make it even better. • Bland and deprived of feels. • Many tags were repetitive, making the writing boring. • No richness or variety of words were used.
𝙶𝚛𝚊𝚖𝚖𝚊𝚛 𝙰𝚗𝚍 𝚅𝚘𝚌𝚊𝚋𝚞𝚕𝚊𝚛𝚢 :: 16/20 • Tags punctuations mistakes; not often but still was noticeable. • Tense switch; quite often. • Few uses of capitalizing, in between ongoing sentences. • In few places, more than one person's dialogues were in the paragraph. They should be in separate paragraphs even if the other says 'oh' like small dialogues.
𝚁𝚎𝚟𝚒𝚎𝚠𝚎𝚛'𝚜 𝚃𝚑𝚘𝚞𝚐𝚑𝚝𝚜 :: 3/5
•The pace of the character weren't too fast but the pace of the chapters were really fast, the scenes felt off sometimes but other than that it's actually really good! Keep it up.
𝐓𝐨𝐭𝐚𝐥 :: 63 /100
𝐒𝐭𝐫𝐞𝐧𝐠𝐭𝐡𝐬 𝐀𝐧𝐝 𝐖𝐞𝐚𝐤𝐧𝐞𝐬𝐬𝐞𝐬 ::
•Mosty keeping the pace correct is your weakness while your good writing and strong maintaining plot would be your strength. You should focus on the describing the character's emotions more and maybe add some thoughts like 'its so annoying' or ' I wanna cry a river' etc. Focus on one scene a little more, describe the character's relationship with a little more words. Add more filler chapters of the characters just getting along or spending time together. And make the scenes longer with more dialogues and descriptions.
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