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- Reviewer Bun -
Cover :: 9.5/10
The cover is quite beautiful and done with good details. It goes along with the theme and vibes of the entire story, seeing their enmity turning into a special bond, just the way it's shown on the cover.
The half mark has been taken off for the irrelevant face claim. Of course, it's fine too, but the book could've been also taken for an IU x Jungkook fanfiction when it's an OC x Jungkook.
Title :: 3/5
Looking at the start of the book, the title seemed pretty irrelevant to me. They did not skedaddle at the start, but quite later in the book, where Jungkook started playing tricks on Sooyoon, and that got her in some serious trouble.
But later on in the book, it makes sense. Also, the title is short and quite beautiful, as the word used is a nice and uncommon one, with a nice enunciation.
Blurb :: 7/10
The blurb, though not really informative about anything, still succeeds at portraying the kind of relationship Jungkook had with Sooyoon - full of hatred and enmity. The second half of the blurb is better, clarifying some things for the reader and making it more interesting since it doesn't give away the plot but just the theme of the story.
The scores are cut away for the grammatical mistakes in the blurb, which can be rectified easily. Grammar and vocabulary must be perfect in a blurb since it's a part of the first impression of the entire story and readers judge it just as well. Also, it could've been written in a better manner.
Plot and twists :: 20/25
The idea and theme aren't one of the most original; we've seen several enemies to lovers plots. It was quite cliché in the start, right when their rivalry was defined, and the reason was their families. It continued typically too - Jungkook finding a way to blackmail Sooyoon.
The plot doesn't have many twists, but it has a good flow to it which somehow made the story pleasant enough to read. I think there were some unexpected events, like Yeonjun helping them, or Yoonseok getting locked up.
Overall, the plot seems cliché but you can always make it interesting with other elements like suspense, comedy or romance. I don't think your plot lacks that, so it's a plus.
Characters and emotions :: 7/10
The characters are portrayed beautifully, and the character development goes well with the proceeding of the plot. The characters seem quite competitive and selfish but got selfless when it came to each other; the start of the romance, obviously.
The emotions are just fine throughout the book, but it would've been better if you took time to elaborate what the character is feeling at some important points, like Jungkook when he finds out about the wedding, or Sooyoon when she gets to know she needs to clean Jungkook's bike.
It's also nice to see you focusing enough on the side characters since it makes the story nicer to read and more complete.
Writing style :: 13/15
You have a nice and descriptive writing style, and it made the book pleasing to read. I think you don't need huge changes here, but just try to focus on emotions in some critical situations.
Also, focus on adding some dialogues to the story, since it would be crucial later to show how the characters get along and develop.
Grammar and vocabulary :: 17/20
The grammar in the book is fairly good. I could hardly find any major mistakes, but there are a few mistakes like comma splices.
The vocabulary is good too, but it could've been better. Maybe adding some better words for describing things and adding emotions would work. You could keep it simple as well, but perhaps enhancing the vocabulary would add to the betterment of the book.
Reviewer's thoughts :: 4/5
I've read one of your books earlier, and the fact that your writing has improved so much makes me glad. Your writing style and word choice have improved. The plot is well thought out and is enjoyable. You've learnt to portray characters well and also improved the grammar and punctuation. Makes me feel good, somehow.
I hope you focus on the small mistakes and edit them well. Good luck with the plot and character development.
Total :: 80.5/100
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