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-Reviewer May-
𝙱𝚘𝚘𝚔 𝙲𝚘𝚟𝚎𝚛: 7/10
The cover is eye-catching but the quality is unsatisfactory. A different font with a different color could've been used for the words 'How Not To Be". And for the word "Straight", it would've been pleasing if you had coordinated with the color scheme, probably the jacket's color.
𝚃𝚒𝚝𝚕𝚎: 9/10
The plot revolves around everything that societies don't support and when I read the title, I thought it was about a lad coming a very religious family but liking the same sex as them, against the family's virtues. But it is appreciable that the title doesn't expose much of the plot.
𝙳𝚎𝚜𝚌𝚛𝚒𝚙𝚝𝚒𝚘𝚗: 12.5/15
It was really exposing. You should've just added those dialogues in multiple paragraphs and then mentioned a little about what the character feels about their opinions. The number of questions asked should be reduced.
𝚂𝚝𝚘𝚛𝚢𝚕𝚒𝚗𝚎: 19/20
It was as remarkable as a New York best-seller book. Even though many can come up with this type of content, the way you represented the story and the characters is applaudable. Your writing style is also praiseworthy.
𝙲𝚑𝚊𝚛𝚊𝚌𝚝𝚎𝚛𝚜: 8.5/10
I love the characters but there needs to be some more character development. The interactions between the characters were pleasing.
𝙳𝚒𝚊𝚕𝚘𝚐𝚞𝚎 𝙳𝚎𝚕𝚒𝚟𝚎𝚛𝚢: 14/15
The dialogues were good and everything made sense. But I would suggest you move on to the next paragraph when a different character is speaking so that the emotions and the story don't get mixed up.
𝙶𝚛𝚊𝚖𝚖𝚊𝚛 𝚊𝚗𝚍 𝚅𝚘𝚌𝚊𝚋𝚞𝚕𝚊𝚛𝚢: 13/20
Punctuations were used at unwanted places. For example,
"Right," I said, beginning to walk the other way, "It doesn't matter."
After the word 'way',there should've been a full stop instead of a comma. I would also appreciate it if you had written the next dialogue in a new paragraph, for it would have portrayed the emotions better and ended the scene better as well. Another example: "Besides another fucking heatwave in Aussie? Yeah, you never know." I muttered, "Walking me home today?"
After the first dialogue ended, there should have been a comma instead of a full-stop and after the word 'muttered' it should have been full stop in place of the comma. We use commas before verbal tags ("I wonder," She muttered. ) and full-stops before action tags ("Oh okay." She kept on stirring the soup.) Small typography mistakes were spotted here.
𝕋𝕠𝕥𝕒𝕝: 83/100
𝑆𝑡𝑟𝑒𝑛𝑔𝑡ℎ𝑠 𝑎𝑛𝑑 𝑊𝑒𝑎𝑘𝑛𝑒𝑠𝑠𝑒𝑠: Your writing is your greatest strength. The way you write keeps readers totally mesmerized into the book. Your weakness is the misuse of punctuations, especially commas and full stops.
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