The Mystical Awards 2.0 July Reviews

Fanfiction: Fates Games: Redemption

Book: Fates Games: Redemption
Genre: Fanfiction
Writer: regulus_black717
Reviewed by non_deficere

Cover/Description:
The book cover is dark and mysterious, that combined with the vague yet full of empty questions and intriguing statements really raised my curiosity.

The beginning:
To be honest I was expecting something else when I read the description, I wasn't totally aware that was a harry potter fanfiction, was nothing mentioned in the description, but nonetheless, your book is really good, and although I'm probably not the best person to judge it due to not be familiar with the concept, I thought it was really well written.

Detailing/Grammar:
You detailed and described amazing, although I think you used the formal descriptions, I wish you just had let go and would describe things more freely, I don't know why but I felt like you were holding back in some scenes.

Character Development/Plot:
The plot seems to have a tremendous potential, as for the characters, I wasn't really sure of who they were, I wish that was an introduction at the beginning, and I also felt that changing places/times too often during the chapter was a bit confusing at times.

My view as a reader:
I'm not a Happy Poter fan, so I'm not going to comment on the plot too much, also characters were a bit confusing to me, but I can tell you what I understood.
I think you have a really nice story, I could see a lot of twists and more active scenes, as a point of the view of someone who isn't a fan, I would suggest for you to add an introduction to your book with a little resume if who is who, and just give a little insight of the history behind each character and their connection.

Overall I think you have a really really good book, I couldn't stop noticing that your chapters became shorter, I'm not sure what's the reason behind it, but would like to tell you that every book is unique and you can definitely write, the only thing I felt reading this, is that this book is written specifically for a certain group of people and tears why I recommend making the proper introductions so everyone could understand it. All the best.
-claudushka

I would rate this book 3/5