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All Lips Turn Blue (Chapters 2 - 6) - @Nyhterides

All Lips Turn Blue (Chapter 2 - 6) by Nyhterides    

Reviewed by AmyMarieZ

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Overview: All Lips Turn Blue is a thrilling and poetic gothic horror story. Featuring a cast of paranormals such as vampires and werewolves, the eerie atmosphere and sinister characters create a chilling setting. With a dark plot, even darker characters, and adult themes such as abuse, this story certainly isn't a light hearted read, but for someone looking for something that will chill them both with beautiful prose and horror, its gothic charms may be just the thing.

Structure: The structure of this story stood out to me, both in the way the text itself is presented, and the style of the narration. The story uses both first person and third person past tense narration, which is done in a very controlled and effective way. The third person is used to show scenes in which the main protagonist Eden is not in, which adds much more depth and darkness to the story as a whole. I felt like the distinct voices of each of the different POV characters came across strongly. The were well defined and set apart from each other, yet at the same time, the overall tone of the piece remained consistent, giving the story a cohesive feel across all chapters.

Grammar: In general, the grammar in All Lips Turn Blue was consistent and well done. There were no recurring grammatical errors that were distracting enough to deter from the story in any way. I noticed a few small typos, but other than that the story feels very polished.

Pace: The pace of this story is fairly slow overall, but it works well with the style. Since the story follows many different characters, the first couple of chapters are primarily spent introducing each of the characters, their situations, and possible conflicts for the story moving forward. So far, it seems like the main plot development is occurring during the chapters in Eden's POV. The chapters in the other characters POV are interesting and pull me in, but they don't seem to be pushing the main plot of the story forward as much as Eden's chapters do. To me, it seems like this is necessary for the type of story this is. First, the reader needs to get an idea of what things are like before everything changes. I feel like as the story progresses, Eden coming to town will be the event that will influence the other character's storylines to take off as well.

Character Development: The characters in All Lips Turn Blue are one of my favorite things about the story so far. Each of the characters are unique and stand out as dramatic and larger than life. Even though many characters are introduced in the first set of chapters of the story, I found all of them extremely memorable. Often times, when so many characters are introduced so quickly I lose track of them, but that was not at all the case here.

Some of the characters are disgustingly evil, while some are more dark and mysterious. Even the protagonists of this story seem to have a lot of darkness to them, and with some of the characters I'm really not quite sure if they are good or bad yet. The morally ambiguous nature of the characters adds to their interest and depth! I'll use this section to provide my thoughts on a few of the main characters I've been introduced to so far.

EDEN: Eden shines in this story as the obvious protagonist, although even she seems to have some darkness to her. Her struggle to find out about her father feels very real, and the pain she experiences while reading the letter hits hard and makes me feel for the character. I felt like the scene where she found her mother dead was also a very emotionally striking scene, although I thought a bit more time could have been spent at the beginning of the scene to develop it even more.