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A. OPENING
Prologue
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- The first phrase Isang dapit hapon is already a turn off. Pinaglumaan na. If I didn't know the writer, I would have thought that she's a lot older than me. Ganyan ang umpisa ng kuwento ni Lola. Iyong tipong classic fairy tale beginning na Once upon a time.
It's better to drop the phrase Isang dapit hapon and start the narrative with Malakas ang ihip ng hangin. A mental image will be formed immediately in the reader's mind if it's written that way.
The sentence is also too long. Even if it is punctuated correctly, it is still hard to understand. Consider breaking it for readability.
- Although the idea is there, I don't think that this is a prologue. If this is a proper prologue, the reader will feel a distinct switch when he starts reading Chapter One. Try changing the title to "Chapter 1" and you'll see for yourself that the transition to the next chapter is seamless.
