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Review: Racing Hearts

Reviewer: Minooiii

Author of the book: Artemis_223

Title:

Your title is well-suited for your storyline so that's good.

Cover:

Your cover is perfect as hell, haha

Blurb:

I like the way your blurb because it's summarised and also got to the important point.
It reminds me of Taylor Swift's" I knew you were Trouble " song ~

Plot:

The whole plot sounds interesting because it's involved a nerd girl who wants to experience a new world and a bad boy who wants to put his hand on someone like a blank space, so a chaotic romance plot is always intriguing to read.... well done.

Characters:

Melissa the female lead, she's easy to understand, and her lifestyle, etc, but also, she has a hidden side that she's been suppressing up to this day. So showing her true capacities and how wild she is could be a good twist in your story...
Jake: make, the male lead, looks playboy, and troubled but his hidden true feelings and the reasons behind his behaviour make it interesting and mysterious...
I like to see Melissa taming him...haha~...
In conclusion, your characters are well organised...

Writing style:

I like the way you describe and write...you have a unique and unpredictable writing style, so I liked that!

Grammar:
It is good. I didn't notice any mistakes.

Engagement:

As for the engagement of the story, I should say Chapters 1 to 5 were perfect and well done, dear.
However,  from Chapters 6 up to 10, the storyline was a bit slow, I guess, and also I noticed " Jake is dangerous " .....
In my belief, you don't have to keep reminding them that he's dangerous in every paragraph or Melissa's thoughts~...
Because you can describe it through his actions and the way he talks, and people would get that, right? ... And for Melissa's thoughts you can describe them in new ways, like,
"Melissa could've felt a thrill coming from Jake's voice, or he seems to have a dark side with a faint flickered light inside it, which tingled my curiosity about him"...
After chapter 10, the story become its thrill again, and it was fine!...

Overall:

Your story and idea are new, and worthy to read. You've done great and I'm sure you'll get your fans shortly, so keep going. Don't lose hope.

Tips:

As l observed your profile, I got that you were a bit confused about your story, and I understand that as a writer so here are my tips for you:

1) Have a notebook! Every time that a scene or idea would come to your mind, write it down right away in a few words.  It doesn't have to be long, it's just a reminder for you to remember and use it. 
2) Make a goal for your story to not get lost, for example, "How do you want to keep your story keep going, what are the most important incidents or events of this story, and how your characters will get development,  how do you to end it "
3) promote your story in their DM messages to people who are interested in these kinds of romance novels.
4) Use more specific has to get known by others.

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