ISAAC's OC REVIEWs

Kassandra Turner [F]

Please note that I ask a lot of questions throughout the review, you by no means have to answer them, they are simply to get you thinking more in-depth about your character. Enjoy!

Fandom: Marvel Universe

Full name: Kassandra Turner

[ Is she known as 'Kassandra' or 'Kassy'? What do people more commonly call her?]

Age: 26

Gender: Female

DOB: November 3rd 1983

[ So we're around about Iron Man 1 era, righto.]

Sexuality: Pansexual

Species: Human

Nationality: American

Appearance: She a fairly tall young woman with shoulder length, wavy brunette hair. Her skin is a light tan. Her eyes are chestnut brown with long eyelashes, framed with an round face. And her body shape is a nice hourglass with a curvy waist.

[ She seems to be quiet attractive. Does she have to exercise to keep her figure the way it is? Was it difficult for her to lose the baby weight? Does she have any stretch marks from her pregnancy? She seems to be fitting the 'perfect' a wee' bit too well. Consider adding a couple of flaws to her appearance.

Birthmarks? Stretch marks? Moles? Maybe a proper nasty scar from that lab explosion. Perhaps she's actually got burns on her face from the explosion but she's like Rembrandt with a make-up brush and is able to make them appear invisible.]

Height: 5'4

[ 5'4" is the average for American women. That being said I'd say she was fairly average in terms of height. If you wanted her to be fairly tall perhaps push up her height a couple inches.]

Weight: 128 lbs

Personality: She's a party girl who loves to have fun.

[ She's also a mother, don't forget that. We wouldn't want Kassy rolling on back home to Tess reeking of alcohol or whatever else Kassy does to have fun.]

Though she doesn't often care about people, she does care about children, especially young girls, helping them if they need it.

[ I'm reading that as more often than not she's rude and uncaring, maybe a little self-centred. But I'm also seeing it as she doesn't care about other's opinions of her. But I'm not sure perhaps work back into it and explain what you mean when you say 'she doesn't often care about people.'

As for the second half of the sentence, why does she care about children? Why is she willing to help them out? You could do with expanding more on this. It seems to be Kassy's motherly side of her personality starting to shine through. I definitely think you need to draw this side out of her more.]

She loves to get a reaction out of people, by means of teasing, flirting etc. She finds it amusing.

[ I'd bring her childish-ness into this section, expand a bit more on that. Why does she find it amusing? Why does she love the reaction?]

She's pretty sarcastic, not taking things seriously unless she deams it serious.

[ How do others feel about her sarcasm and not taking things seriously? How does this affect her relationship with her daughter?

The last section about her not taking something serious 'unless she deems it serious' needs more explaining if it's going to stay in. How does she act when she doesn't deem something serious? What does she deem serious? Why does/doesn't she deem it serious. It's vague, for all we know Kassy could see the bar running out of her favourite drink as a serious matter but not issues that involve her income for example. If you can expand on it more, fingers crossed it should work itself out.